public enemies

06/2011

two worlds apart, separate lives

tangled on the battle front

                 bodies lay mangled at our hands

oh the forest we have torn down

desperately trying to reach each other  

                 oh the cities we have laid to waste

only to be in each others arms

acting on our criminal attributes 

                  reduced to our primal instincts 

now we're riding around, raining terror

our bullets shower in waves

                   they will never take us alive, my love

feeling like a scene Bonnie & Clyde 

our essence is on this long road 

                   our liveliness beats from the speakers

you laugh at the blue lights in the mirror

pointing at the absurd billboards

                    the scenery flies by in perfection

in this moment I am truly happy

please don't wake me up

Reviews

[GunMetal]

I like how you imply that it's a dream without coming out and saying it. I would agree with ivizarx about revealing the metaphor. Though mentioning Bonnie & Clyde confirms that this poem isn't directly about them, the comparison is clear enough without it. Over all, this was thrilling and left a good taste. "our liveliness beats from the speakers" Terrific.

[To be scene To be heard..]

oce again your poem amazes me! great work

[Amenti Amaris Raven]

Holy S**t!!! Thats amazing!!!! Btw, my friend still thinks your hot.

[Rhea752]

great poem. i like the reference to Bonnie and Clyde. keep it up.

[Cheyenne Harris]

This is really good!! Love the reference to Bonnie & Clyde. You're use of metaphors is awesome. :)

[-musicfunk-]

another good writings of yours =]

[Katrina Mckeown]

brilliantly written, great use of imagery, love you imagination and the theme of a dream!


Love it!!

[Zoey Dead Girl]

Love the reference of Bonnie and Clyde. This was good. Made me think about living in a dream. Good work :3

[Kailor Mason]

I saw Public Enemies, with Johnny Depp. That was an awesome film; and this poem, I believe, really does pay a respectful homage to it.

[Layla J Omorose]

Good poem. It reminds me of a lot of crime movies I have seen. Specifically Public Enemies. Good job

[~*Moody Thursday*~]

Great poem! It's very refreshing to read something other than teen angst quickly scribbled in simple words. Pardon my bitterness, I just had a lot of RR with really crappy poetry :-p
But this one was excellent, I really enjoyed reading it!