Forever, My Love

A love story that can never be. Inspired by a book.

Glance,

It started with a glance.

A glance that makes the heart beat faster,

That hinted at something.

That hinted at love.

 

Touch,

It continues with a touch.

An innocent touch.

One you wouldn't think anything about.

You'd think it was simply friendship.

But it was more.

It was always more.

 

Love,

It blossoms when the words are said.

The three words,

Words hidden,

Secrets kept.

It could turn into something worse.

Brewing in the horizon.

 

Kiss,

The fire was lit by a kiss.

The fire that exploded everything.

That starts it all.

 

Seperation,

Ignoring the screams,

The crying out of names,

Hands searching for each other in the empty air.

 

Glance,

They take him away with a glance.

The silent goodbye.

Hidden words come rushing back,

And they know it will never be over.

Reviews

[David O Whalen (O Haol..]

A very nicely written piece Green monster, You write like a much more mature poet than your age would suppose. You avoided the cliched and cloying words and phrases that young writers are prone to use. I think you have a bright future ahead of you. I shall read your other poems soon and hope to see that same degree of maturity in them also. Only one tiny nit-pick and that is: "seperation" is spelled incorrectly. Good write, and thanks for reading and commenting on mine. I am older than dirt and my poetry goes from the sublime to the ridiculous. Hopefully you will not be afraid to let your writing be different and daring. There is one very successful writer on poetry showcase who is stuck like a broken record in one genre (religious themed poetry) and never dares to try anything different. You read one poem by her and you've read them all, so I never bother to read to read her! So, dare to be different, as you seem to have the talent for it. Thanks again for reading me Oh!, join us on Poetry showcase and on Poemhunter.com, both very good sites.

[Captain]

Such a familiar cycle for so many . . . it's hard and it's unhealthy. There are other people out there. If being with this person is such a challenge, it's not fair to either of you; nor is it either of yours fault. You just lack in full compatibility. The hard, rough truth is, there is someone out there better for them, just as there is someone out there better for you. Some one who's opinions, ideals and morals suit more appropriately. More naturally.
Still a beautiful expression as a poem itself.
'Captain

[Alex Vidmar]

This is great. Love the way you've set this up :) Well Done!

[Diwakar - "The Warrior ..]

very nicely written & expressed :-)

[thehottamale]

I have to agree with David, you write like someone who has been through more than your years, someone with experience and knowledge. My grandmother used to say that people like you had "been here before", I think she was right.

[Cathy Wattam]

This is a very nice poem. I like the way you ended as you began with the theme running throughout. Well done, I enjoyed reading it.