Glittery Sunset

Glittery Sunset

A Poem by Mustafa
"

the sun setting

"
As the world grows quiet
The sun bows out gracefully
As the sun sets to recharge itself 
The sun shows its magnificence in an indirect way

Like the fall
The sun changes color
It goes from a brilliant yellow
To a dim and
warm orange glow

It dips ever so slowly
Soon it disappears from our view
Only to appear on the other side
of the world
The cycle of beauty the sun provides then starts over again


© 2010 Mustafa



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Very good concept and execution overall. I agree the first stanza could be better.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Nice work. I have a problem with the first stanza in general. Too simple and doesn't demonstrate the talent that I know you have. Too dull. Especially, the third line. "As it sets" As it sets? Sets? I need more. Adjectives, anything. Otherwise, nice job on doing the requirements.

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Posted 7 Years Ago


i love this truly beautiful in its simplicity. well done meeting the challenge.

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Posted 7 Years Ago


A nice short piece, long on sentiment.:)

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Posted 7 Years Ago


So nice and I really love sunset

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Posted 7 Years Ago


wow..short but beautiful. i love the sunset..especially when you're with the one you love and your family of course.. Thanks.. keep it up!

:)

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Posted 7 Years Ago


Nothing as beautiful as a beautiful sunset. A six pack of beer and a lot of time with the sunset. A good night. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

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Posted 7 Years Ago


Nice for a short poem. Thanks for posting in the group.

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Posted 7 Years Ago


Nice short one. Beautiful nontheless!

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Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on March 30, 2010
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Mustafa

Astoria, NY



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