from afar.

this is too funny, another one of my introverted methods to break the ice. a poem written in resent for transferring my friend to another place in the office. lol

from afar.

distant, too far away
to say i need you to stay
beside my side
and hold these freezing hands
for i couldn't stand this solitaire game,
i couldn't call out your name.
why did they allow me such pain?
what would they gain
for rearranging the chairs,
why do they care
if i want to kiss your hair
and if i wanted to stare
at your eyes at a kissing distance?
or write my secrets, for instance,
to your lips or feel the touch
of your fingertips,
playing softly over my palm,
like a guitarist strumming a calm tune
from the melodies of my heart
but you aren't here! you aren't near,
and your distance draws out a tear,
but i can only sigh, and i can only cry
at the back of my eyes,
i can't help it. i do nothing but sit
and watch you like a star,
glancing, glittering, admiring
the beauty that you are...

from afar.

Author's Note

no capitalizations. i am not that meek. lol

Reviews

[nicolo]

I used not to do some capitalizations also. ahahaha But I for some reason, I changed instantly, maybe I changed when I had the job of writing articles. AHAHAHAHA

So right now, I have a different signature for my poems. xD

This poem just makes me miss school even more. I hope to go back next semester. I miss this kinda scenes. ahahahaha

Distance also creates beauty :) :) :) A long-ranged kiss, just imagine :)

[marielondon]

This is incredible

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

For the topic. . .haha, this is kind of funny. . I liked reading it even though the lack of capatilization does bother me (I'm OCD on those type of matters) and yeah. It flows well enough

-Marie-

[Dayran]

This is quite good. I could see what you are referring to. Perhaps others are starting to see as well. Try again. Not the poem, that's already great!

[Rene Velez]

I like the poem, my only critique is "tears" and "crying" seems a bit cliche and over dramatic, there are other non dramatic words you can use to get your point across, sometimes less is more...food for thought.

[Aleyah]

AHH!!! i love the flow of this soooo much. it's perfection. i love the desperate craving...it's so clearly stated yet so amazingly put into words! awesome poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love the "and i can only cry at the back of my eyes" ---very awesome. but my absolute FAVORITE part was from the beginning first line of the poem to the line "why did they allow me such pain?"

[NightShade]

VERY well written piece, resplendent with honest emotions and the desires that spring from them.

[Jane Doe]

Cutee!!!!:) lol it's funny too
It's like a stalker tho o_0 lol:)
Perfect song for this is
Awwwwww shucks I forgot it :(
Great write!!!:)
~abbie
100/100

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Those school days and admiring the crushes for afar, very well portrayed, I love it :)