Liar.Liar. Hearts On Fire (Tanka #63)

Liar.Liar. Hearts On Fire (Tanka #63)

A Poem by MandaBear
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Just got inspired

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Liar Liar hearts on fire

Do you feel the burning inside?
Liar Liar hearts on fire
It is the one you told before
The one where you say you loved me

© 2016 MandaBear



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Love this line-
"liar,liar hearts on fire"
Meaningful and powerful!


Posted 9 Months Ago


MandaBear

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much! I am glad to see you enjoyed my writing!
Tazeen Ahmed

9 Months Ago

You're very welcome!!!
Great piece about deception and lies. Had it done to me a couple of times.

Liar liar hearts on fire - beautifully sums it up.

Kudos to you.

Mark.

Posted 9 Months Ago


MandaBear

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much Mark. I am glad you enjoyed my writing.
matrixmark

9 Months Ago

Thnak you too, for a piece which I could relate to from a ime long, long ago.

Mark.
Short yet strong and explicit. The iteration stresses the emotion and makes it more powerful.

Posted 10 Months Ago


MandaBear

10 Months Ago

Thank you for the lovely comment. Made my day =)
this piece is short , but it is so too the point and beautiful I love it

Posted 10 Months Ago


MandaBear

10 Months Ago

I am so glad to hear you loved it =)
I wasn't quite sure what was going on here. I think it's saying that 'you say you loved me' when in fact it was a lie...

But I like the image and there is an intensity about the short lines and the repetition of 'liar'. 'Hearts on fire' is a great phrase...

Posted 11 Months Ago


MandaBear

11 Months Ago

Yeah that is what I was going for. It needs work to get the point across better I think but at the t.. read more

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