Etched on the Heart

Etched on the Heart

A Poem by Poetic Beauty

Beneath this fleshy outer layer
Underneath sinew and bone
Lays a muscle that beats relentlessly
Thumping a perfect rhythm
Life sustaining beat
Of immaculate song

Look beyond the biology
Gaze past the rib cage
Deeper still inspect the pericardium
With a microscope

Etched hidden, immersed
Submerged in the physiology
Are words scripted, engraved
On the outside layer of this
Delicately strong organ

Some souls transcribe
Infusing their ink
Sketching their names on the heart
Illuminating letters on their soul

© 2017 Poetic Beauty



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Wow this is so deep and mesmerizing and raw and pure. I could actually see that very heart, as it beat, giving life to the body it beholds, and the scars and words embezzled on the muscle of that heart as well.
Imagery was amazing, and your writing seems very professional in terms of anatomy and such. I felt as if I was the Doctor operating within a patients body to seek this heart out. Superb Writing, Great Job

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much. It took some tweaking to get the right words in their place



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Kay
Such beautiful and powerful words. I really love this.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

Thank you. This one took some work to get it right with using medical terms.
Wow this is so deep and mesmerizing and raw and pure. I could actually see that very heart, as it beat, giving life to the body it beholds, and the scars and words embezzled on the muscle of that heart as well.
Imagery was amazing, and your writing seems very professional in terms of anatomy and such. I felt as if I was the Doctor operating within a patients body to seek this heart out. Superb Writing, Great Job

Posted 5 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much. It took some tweaking to get the right words in their place
You really get to the heart of the matter here. I love your use of language, I'm not at your poetic level but I can appreciate the beauty of your words.
Thank you.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

Thank you and really I'm still learning. Don't ask me to write any of the technical meters or sonnet.. read more
Wow, I never expected to learn about the inter~workings of the heart while reading poetry but you pulled it off without a break in the flow. Kudos, my friend.

Each stanza is well infused with the pain that one feels within their heart ~ which is only allowed to be shared through the words of a poet.

PB, you ask in stanza 3 " Are words scripted, engraved
On the outside layer of this
Delicately strong organ" ... I can only speak of my own heartache, where the pain continues to live deep WITHIN each darkened chamber of my heart.

Thanks for sharing this heartfelt piece with us and I look forward to reading more words from your heart.

Please take care and have a restful night.

Blessings,
~ hsg


Posted 5 Months Ago


Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

Thank you. I believe certain people etch their names on our hearts for different reasons. And with t.. read more
heavenscentgirl1

5 Months Ago

I totally agree ~ for I'm living proof of that belief my friend. We have no control over some thing.. read more
i am clueless in physiology...but i still felt an understanding of this...what is physical contains most of what is emotional...the vessel for it...
poets have a different heartbeat...i just feel that is true...our physiology looks the same...but it's not.
not quite. we are parallel but in ways we are in another plane.

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

So very true. I believe poets feel deeper than others. That is how we are able to write emotions on .. read more
So poignant. I love the use of actual physiology terms. I have a profound appreciation for physiology after taking many science and anatomy classes. It tickled me pink to see you use "pericardium" and "microscope"! I really enjoyed this poem.

One thing to note: you misspelled "imersed" in the third stanza. It should be "immersed".

Posted 5 Months Ago


Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. This one took a bit of work with using the medical terms and finding .. read more
E.V. Black

5 Months Ago

When I was writing my poem "Perfect Symmetry", the process was much the same as yours: trying to fit.. read more
Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

Yes and I have some on here because I pasted them with word I can't fix. It comes up with all these .. read more
I love your dichotomy of the physical and the spiritual, body and soul as one, yet existing as diverse worlds. Perhaps that is the balance we all must find to exist in this mystery of the world. Profoundly voiced.

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Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

I believe the physical is connected to the spiritual in many ways. Thank you for your kind words. Th.. read more
An owl on the moon

5 Months Ago

You breathed it out so wondrously. And yes, I believe this too, in the connections of the physical a.. read more
Very scientific and romantic at the same time. You etch your verse in love and eternity. An excellent one...:)................

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

This one took a bit of looking up and finding the right place for the words. Different people leave .. read more
Sami Khalil

5 Months Ago

So true. You are welcome. ..::::)))
really enjoyed this piece...
what is written on our hearts...
this is stunningly written

Posted 5 Months Ago


Poetic Beauty

5 Months Ago

Thank you. I got a little creative with this piece using the medical terms.

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Poetic Beauty

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