Why did you leave me?

Why did you leave me?

A Poem by Raj Sahu
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The poem is based on the separation of two loving souls.

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Why did you leave me?
Was I wrong?
Why you didn't see,
That I cried all night long?

Why did you leave me?
Was there any misunderstanding?
Why did you do this?
Was our relation not outstanding?

Why did you leave me?
Had I ever hurt you?
Why you didn't complain,
And didn't even give me a clue?

I wish that may you return back,
Every day my heart receives an attack.

© 2018 Raj Sahu



Author's Note

Raj Sahu
What is your recommendation to both the souls?

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“Why did you leave me?
Was I wrong?
Why you didn't see,
That I cried all night long?"

Separation is the worst thing between any relation. I am too sorrowful for both the souls.
Now, about the poem, the question verses are good as they make a musical sense. The last two lines are too touching. My only suggestion to both the souls that they can come together and mediate between themselves.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

1 Month Ago

Thanks a lot! Your suggestion is also good.



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i can relate to this many times through my single years after divorce. It affects young and old
wise and stupid and blind and seeing, deaf and dumb, we all need loveo and fear rejection.
Eventually as you age you get to just like your own company and love yourself and find yourself your true self in your loneliness.
this is an art i believe.
i liked your poem and wish you well
thanks for entering into my competition

Posted 1 Day Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

1 Day Ago

Thanks a lot.
Juliespenhere

15 Hours Ago

you are most welcome like you writing a good deal
To the one who left: it really just depends on the situation. Our experiences are what shape us and I imagine the one who fled is traumatized by something in their past that is afraid of love or perhaps this love was toxic to begin with. If this was a long-time love it could be because they have started to take their loyalty for granted and aren't truly understanding each other like they used to and now they need their distance to see if that love is still real and if they meet again then you'll learn your answer and if you never see them again then there will be another chance with another love.
For the other person, the one left behind, don't go chasing after the one who left - they'll need to find their own way back if it is meant to be but do not close off from the world or this person - unless abusive, that's when you stay the hell away. If they meet again they'll find their answers but now, that they've left, pick up the pieces and start over someplace new. Figure yourself out before walking into another relationship but definitely express what you're feeling before it drowns you.
When I say you I mean third person out of an outsider's view. Not like you you unless this is you. Powerful story, the emotions of anguish, despair, and unanswered questions.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

1 Month Ago

Thanks a lot for such a inspirational review.
Follow your path man, she will follow you.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

1 Month Ago

Thank you.
I hope that she may realise her very mistake and retreat back.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

1 Month Ago

Thank you.
So sad...er..lovely composition..er..like your poem..

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

1 Month Ago

Thank you!
“Why did you leave me?
Was I wrong?
Why you didn't see,
That I cried all night long?"

Separation is the worst thing between any relation. I am too sorrowful for both the souls.
Now, about the poem, the question verses are good as they make a musical sense. The last two lines are too touching. My only suggestion to both the souls that they can come together and mediate between themselves.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

1 Month Ago

Thanks a lot! Your suggestion is also good.
‘I wish that may you return back,
Every day my heart receives an attack.'
It is amazing...I should say that they should accept their destiny...

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

1 Month Ago

Thank you!
‘When two hearts separate, one soul dies'

It is very painful depiction there. I should recommend these two souls to forget everything and move ahead.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

1 Month Ago

Thank you!
Beautifully emotional. Well done!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Months Ago

Thank you.
magical... i really like the choice of words and subject

I'm new on here, so it would be an honour if you could review some of my poems!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Raj Sahu

7 Months Ago

Thank you.

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Added on May 17, 2017
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Tags: Love, Separation, Sadness, Cry, Life

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Raj Sahu
Raj Sahu

Burhanpur, Madhya Pradesh, India



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Hello everyone. Myself Raj Sahu, a 17-year-old boy who is a servant of the God until his last breath. I write poems and thinks that in future I will try other writings too. I also love reading. My fav.. more..

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