Unfinished Poems 1

Unfinished Poems 1

A Chapter by redzone
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...two thoughts...

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Snippets: Unfinished Poems 1

Midnight
and the light was fandangled
in many shades.
Maybe it was just moon beams
fluttering from the sky,
but you always knew
how to make a grand entrance,
arousing heart beats,
serenading ink to dance across my page.
~~~
Or maybe, it was the way Mars
is sometimes the brightest orb in the sky
and reflects an impossible
“wish I may,
wish I might
have my wish tonight”,
a midnight kiss
to carry my heart,
but which can never come true….
Aztec Warrior/redzone  9.28.2016



© 2016 redzone



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redzone
....thanks for reading..


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The one who can charm the ink and make it dance is the one who deserves that midnight kiss....even if it is only in fantasy. You say this is an unfinished poem yet I feel it is very complete. Even wishes that don't come true can make life rosier. Bittersweet loveliness. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


So many strong statements in this poem could be the title. The words "serenading ink ". Tempting title I believe. I liked the tenderness and the pace of the words.
“wish I may,
wish I might
have my wish tonight”,
The above lines. Wonderful. I could write a epic poem from. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Unfinished? Hardly, you've only just begun this celestial journey. Stars may fizzle but your lovely words are delectably searing.

"serenading ink to dance across my page" I wish I had thought of that. Exquisite poetry!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Paloma

1 Year Ago

There's poetry in that response, 'impossible dreams' are usually for dreamers, poets, artistes and c.. read more
redzone

1 Year Ago

can I plead guilty??? ;0)
Paloma

1 Year Ago

Sure but you'll probably get thrown in the brig. :)
...be still my heart...this is the ultimate of romantic musings!

Posted 1 Year Ago


redzone

1 Year Ago

you are too kind Kelly... thanks for your words and sentiments... glad your heart beats, mine is som.. read more
beautiful and romantic but then I got the part where I realized it is an unrealized wish and that is sad.
:(

Posted 1 Year Ago


redzone

1 Year Ago

Ana, it's a star that gets wished on... Mars just laughs at you... see, I do have silly boy dreams, .. read more
this is a touching write,enjoyed the read

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

i have read a few of your writes,i liked them all
redzone

1 Year Ago

and I must do better at reading you as well Ron...
 wordman

1 Year Ago

well ,i appreciate all reviews,but i`m not a attention w***e,lol

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