The Mirror

mirror mirror on the wall who's the ugliest of them all

i walk up to the wicked, distorted mirror. 

my friend Amerine stands there, grimacing 

 

we both gravitate 'round our reflections 

hoping to achieve maximum perfection 

 

Amerine breaks out of the trance 

even if it only lasted a few seconds the moment struck me like a lance 

i never forgot of the mirror 

even though i always thought it a true horror 

i obsessed over looks 

while Amerine decided to read books 

i slowly got over it 

until people decided insults were in

i walk up to the wicked, distorted mirror. 

my friend Amerine stands there,laughing

Author's Note

ignore grammar problems, what do you think

Reviews

[Rahul]

Nice write, i loved this piece, even i can relate this piece with my some friends...lol, this's really good, it's not about fantasy, it's about reality.
you made my nights and i wish i won't be distorting my mirror when i wale up...lol :)

[Rhea752]

Lol thanks :P

[Owlgirl]

Wow. I love how the entire poem seems to revolve or circle. You may want to make every stanza follow the rhyme scheme, or loose the rhyme scheme, but that's an author's choice. Beautifuly worded.

[Amila Jay]

It's a great poem :))

[Lina Grey]

Each little stanza is so intricately written, conveying the differences in priorities over time. The mocking Amerine, the portrayal of a friend turned to an enemy within the echoes of the very laugh you once shared before the mirror, when she stood beside you. Wonderfully penned and inspiring. Thank you.

[♥ Kinnixk]

I love the flow of this poem. Great job :)

[Mackenzie Brooke]

Great poem! I love the concept and the message behind it.

[AK]

Great poem! I loved the flow! Keep writing!

[Forest Green]

Intricately woven...images within images, changes in personality and priorities, yet the same mirror was much like crossed rays...insightful and I must say highly unique.

Liked this...!

[Heromen Selena]

O, mean person! That makes me angry that she laughed at her afterwards. Great write!

[MOON]

Lovely write , like the questioning of self.