You Are - I Am

You are my King

I am your Queen

You are my Lord

I am your Lady

Our love for one another

Grows stronger and stronger

We will hold on to

Longer and longer

Togetherness our certainty

I give myself to thee

Over and over again

However often you covet me.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the vision create by the poem. King and Queen. Give and take. The poem felt like real life. I like the way you ended the poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[DrD]

Concise and traditional, the old English approach to love declaration is always a popular poetry theme. You captured it here as well as it can be done.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much

[C.C. Marx]

Short but sweet and wonderful job :)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[quinfinn]

total love and commitment, well defined and blissfully expressed. very nice write!

[Tarry Franck]

thank you

[TPK Stories]

it was a good write except i didn't quite understand the last line...

[Tarry Franck]

thank you

[Becca Bishop]

I'm going to be horrendously harsh here (ooh alliteration :D). Sorry. Here goes:
-It starts off alright enough; I liked the whole "you are, I am" thing. So good job with that :D
-The lines "We will on to/Longer and longer" seem to be a bit unfinished or maybe I'm just misreading it
-"Togetherness our certainty" doesn't make much sense. Is the narrator saying that they'll always be in love? Or that they're certain that they're meant to be together?
-I didn't particularly enjoy the last line. It sounded like a romantic poem up until then and when you hit that last line it was like...woah. What just happened?

So sorry. I'm being brutally honest about my feelings; please forgive me if I'm getting too honest. It's just one of those days, you know? And we all have poems we like better than others. I'M SO SORRY!!! I DIDN'T MEAN TO HURT YOUR FEELINGS!!!! I'M A HORRIBLE PERSON!!!! Sorry, sorry, sorry, sorry... I'll make it up to you somehow.

[Tarry Franck]

It is quite alright - Don't stress over it :)

[David Scott]

You shall remain constantly coveted with a heart so expessive and giving. I really enjoyed the poem!
Be well.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[Lover Of Words]

Love this

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you :)