Space Bender

Space Bender

A Poem by Precious Seconds

Convex in nature 
Opulent to the touch 

The petition left to tone
Some form of nature

Forged out of tendency
The element of self ridden time

The must have of the meanings
Calling to a place

Just in time the luck strikes
Travel of thought taken

Sitting by the tide
Branding the silence

A stare lost out
Driving pass the midnight 

© 2016 Precious Seconds



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The title really captured me and drew my attention to this poem. It's very interesting. Your phrasing and structure and flow add an element that's very unique. Thank you for sharing, my friend.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Precious Seconds

9 Months Ago

Thank you Micael
I enjoyed the poem. Made the reader think and ponder.
"Sitting by the tide
Branding the silence"
I liked the above lines. Great meaning in the simple statement. Thank you dear friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Months Ago


Precious Seconds

10 Months Ago

Thank you C
Coyote Poetry

9 Months Ago

You are welcome dear Poet.
Eh, inconsistent and that really ruins an otherwise acceptable thing.

Some of your stanza's are self contained while others are not....

For example these do not stand on their own (a comma might help one of them)
"Forged out of tendency
The element of self ridden time"

(add a comma after tendency, it helps more than the aesthetic of not having punctuation)

"Just in time the luck strikes
Travel of thought taken"


(Change "travel" to "travels" or add a "the" at the start of the second line.)

I imagine this is about a watch and the arbitrary nature of the human perception of time. Pretty good idea if that's the case.

Posted 10 Months Ago


To me this represents the struggle for identity. Endless nights awake fighting for answers all alone..

Posted 10 Months Ago


Precious Seconds

10 Months Ago

Maybe so. Maybe Not
This has such a dreamlike quality to your words, which I imagine as a movie reel playing out images to your words, with the images and words melting into one, bending light, reality and imagination.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Precious Seconds

10 Months Ago

Not sure why this piece got so much attention
Thank you so much
Makes me want to go sit on the beach all night...not this time of year, though, way too cold.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Precious Seconds

10 Months Ago

I think we still have beach time here maybe Two more weeks

Thank You James
up all night eh!? some might argue that no straight lines exist no matter what time it is .. Euclid tells us that a convex set is a wobbly circle .. and convex shapes are "non-convex" .. oh my! its 6 am and look what you've done to my brain ma!
https://youtu.be/Cqg3kcwAgso
E.
:) love reading your stuff my friend

Posted 10 Months Ago


Precious Seconds

10 Months Ago

Lol
Thank you E
Love the title and the way the universe speaks great imagery

Posted 10 Months Ago


Precious Seconds

10 Months Ago

Thank you so much

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