dark begginings...

i was thinking of holloween...and i came up with this...a weird poem...

Why do I knew from this day forward that I’ll be alone as the dark corners inside my weird mind… will the dead dreams rise up… or will the leeches of sorrow comes up and eat this dying soul… the monstrous being growing inside… who’d knew that this creature will tear up my reality and concealed me to be preserved… will I ever break free from this chained reality... maybe not… do you mind… I needed space inside your corners and sleep… I just needed rest in this miserable dimension away from the creature that hunts my mortal being… do you know the mind is a creepy thing to play with… I know… so be careful my friend… Would you not mind me staying here for a while… it won’t be long… just a few minutes is enough for me to rest… I’m tired… wake me up after five minutes… then I’ll be gone…

Reviews

[Sugar Plum ♥]

wonderful dark writing, dear Pax! what came to my mind is this big monster seem sensitive too and kind, because he even ask if he could stay :) I like it so much, the way he talks to {me}, as if he is already so near to my space...my favorite lines are :
I just needed rest in this miserable dimension away from the creature that hunts my mortal being… do you know the mind is a creepy thing to play with
so real, true and dark! yes, mind is creepy thing....
No♥r ~

[Pax]

your so right... i always says this: the mind is a very powerful thing...
look what Einstein created.... very powerful and destructive... but i salute him for his contribution... for its in our hands on how we used this power...
thank you so much my friend...

[Kiari Sabon]

i love this and your leeches of sorrow bring into mind shadow people for me they feed off your emotions but love the negative the best offer them your pain and they will take it away. i love this writing keep it up my friend :)

[Pax]

thanks my friend... i kinda don't like these leeches i imagine... if they take away all these negativity the balance of our human nature will be lost... like the balance of good and evil in our mind... thanks again my friend.

[Kiari Sabon]

i understand what you mean and i've been unbalanced with good and evil at different times.. mostly dark and its not the best.. and no problem

[TLK]

I'm interested in the 'leeches of sorrow'. What do they look like, what do they do?

[Pax]

They're normal leeches just a lot bigger inside the mind...they feed off on your memories specially those disapointments, bad deeds, mistakes all the negativity..they love those stuff...glad u question them coz it opens a door of what it really is in my imagination. Thank u...glad u choose this carefully.

[Pax]

I like your weird mind thoughts, they always are bringing the most artistic writes here. It could be interpret in so many different ways, and your ending is almost a dream awake, or a suicidal longing... I'm not sure if that last part is true... but it came over on me as it was... (I hope it's not ofcourse :P) You should almost think with this write, dark beginnings, to dark endings... Intriguing work my friend, thank you for sharing.

E.L.

[Pax]

oh...seems i forgot this lovely review....
"dream awake, or a suicidal longing"
~ wow, a great response... maybe dream awake not so much of a suicidal longing.. it's just a weird case of the mind... ;)
thank you so much dear friend...

You are always welcome my friend :-)

[Corset]

Pax, Pax..shaking Pax...PAX WAKE UP! 5 minutes are up hon, better get moving!! :)

[Pax]

oh.... it's fives minutes already... that rest was worth a dime my friend....
thank you...
read moreoh.... it's fives minutes already... that rest was worth a dime my friend....
thank you...
you put a big smiles on my face...

[Corset]

Creatures that hunt mortal beings are definitely things to hide in corners from, this is spooky but it's also vulnerable and kinda sweet, hide here i'll wake you...

[Pax]

It will be just a few minutes my friend.. and I'll be off.... ;)
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[BlackRose]

This is sure dark and has a bit of creepiness to it too. I have been here at a time or few. Nice work. Check out my poem Crazy Cat, along some of the lines as this. And if you read it, hope you like it.

[Pax]

thanks my friend...

[Boy of the red]

this is very dark and amazing. This has happened to me many times. flashbacks will come and go and i will never sleep so its also relatable. amazing work. great job

[Pax]

wow thank you I'm glad you can relate to the emotional state of this write...

[FJ Davis]

Emotional homelessness.
I know too well this chaotic state of mind, Pax!

[Pax]

:) yes you can put it that way mr. Frank...thanks...

[Mia]

This is very dark indeed. It made me think of someone losing their mind and the lack of sleep only making it worse. As if the voices in the mind feed off the exhaustion. Very creepy. Very nice write my friend :)

[Pax]

your visit means so much Mia my friend...thanks...

[Mia]

You're welcome dear Pax :)