Rainy Night in Georgia

Rainy Night in Georgia

A Poem by wordman
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Color me gray
as the sky fades to black
color me sad
on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia
takes a toll,
as the rain
falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart
i need you to hold
i need you to touch me baby
touch my soul

I guess 
i should have never let you go
now i feel you sweet heart
deep down in my soul

You see 
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...



© 2017 wordman



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A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.



Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jesus & Gypsy Soul

1 Year Ago

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.
 wordman

1 Year Ago

just let it come from the heart,break the rules
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What a beautiful poem! the rhymes and simple choice of words are inspirational. Simply loving it, Thanks for sharing! :-)

Best
Szhzia

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you for the visit
SZHZIA

1 Year Ago

My pleasure and you are welcome... :-)
I like this song & you've taken it in a direction that doesn't feel like a repeat of the lyrics, but your own creation of what a rainy night in Georgia might feel like. Your haunting refrains feel like song lyrics & I can feel the loneliness & regret brimming over your words. I'm OK with irregular rhymes, especially prevalent in lyrics, so I think the reading "sounds" fine.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you very much,if i had any training i would be terrible i`m sure ! not that i am any good at i.. read more
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We regret... we regret... that we will regret we never see at the time...

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

you areright my friend,thanks
Beautifully written Wordman.l love the first stanza,depicting a tone of sadness and regret.This love feeling is a powerful force that gets pencils and pens scribbling thoughts on paper.

I think the should be some thoughts following after the last,one that pleads for a return of your love.

Keep being inspired....chinny barney



Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you for reading !
Hi, Ron!
Lyrically speaking, the word painting of your pen takes me easily into the moment created for imagination to step seamlessly through.
There is something about this kind of dark rain that sets the emotional mood, creating an atmosphere so alluringly real to the senses I can virtually feel the ache and loneliness of sad yearning that pervades so deeply within, it actually embraces the soul, drenching the spirit with dark, forlorn tears.

Man! I need to read more of you! You truly can paint some real-feeling imagery into the mind's-eye, My Fine Poet Friend … a thousand thanks to you for sharing this little beaut! ⁓ Richard


(psst! make the last word "cries")

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you richard for your astute critique , i will change it !
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This sounds more like a Texas song than a Georgia song. Kidding. I like how I didn't even notice you used soul as your last word in the 2nd, 3rd and 4th paragraphs until I went up to find something to critique. It just read cleanly. I enjoyed it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you for the visit ! did you bring the wine ? a texas song,
Jesus & Gypsy Soul

1 Year Ago

Lol strangely enough, I got the wine right here! :) cheers.
 wordman

1 Year Ago

i should have known ! and here i am in tennessee and you in texas,oh well cheers to you !
I can tell you're a strong man, like a watchful musky ox watching over the prairie at dusk... ensuring the safety of all the musky oxen under your watchful musky eye....

Such a gross enjoyment of pleasure it was, of mine, to read you my sweet musky ox of a man....

I will treasure it forever in your graceful memory.

Posted 1 Year Ago


A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.



Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jesus & Gypsy Soul

1 Year Ago

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.
 wordman

1 Year Ago

just let it come from the heart,break the rules
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I let you go
and now my heart is broken
The rain is falling,
now I'm crying
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And now I wanna go to Georgia to see the cold rainy night. It's just that there are times that the rain keeps on reminding us of people we should have never let go.

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you for the visit !
Aprille

1 Year Ago

my pleasure. :)
A very romantic. There is always something that brings that special someone to mind, that someone who we should have never let go. If only......haunt. Fabulous write!

Posted 1 Year Ago


 wordman

1 Year Ago

thank you for the visit !

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