Rainy Night in Georgia

Color me gray

as the sky fades to black

color me sad

on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia

takes a toll,

as the rain

falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart

i need you to hold

i need you to touch me baby

touch my soul

I guess 

i should have never let you go

now i feel you sweet heart

deep down in my soul

You see 

true love never dies

and as i stand here in the rain

my heart still cries ...

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.

[wordman]

thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am a total ameatur

[Jesus & Gypsy Soul]

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.

[wordman]

just let it come from the heart,break the rules

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Ron!
Lyrically speaking, the word painting of your pen takes me easily into the moment created for imagination to step seamlessly through.
There is something about this kind of dark rain that sets the emotional mood, creating an atmosphere so alluringly real to the senses I can virtually feel the ache and loneliness of sad yearning that pervades so deeply within, it actually embraces the soul, drenching the spirit with dark, forlorn tears.

Man! I need to read more of you! You truly can paint some real-feeling imagery into the mind's-eye, My Fine Poet Friend … a thousand thanks to you for sharing this little beaut! ⁓ Richard


(psst! make the last word "cries")

[Chinny Barney]

Hi Richard!

Your review is poetically insightful.l am new here.l'll be glad to receive your critique on my poem which l'll be posting soon.

[Richard🖌]

I recommend that you first read the "About Me" section on my Profile page, Chinny!

[wordman]

thank you richard for your astute critique , i will change it !

[Jesus & Gypsy Soul]

This sounds more like a Texas song than a Georgia song. Kidding. I like how I didn't even notice you used soul as your last word in the 2nd, 3rd and 4th paragraphs until I went up to find something to critique. It just read cleanly. I enjoyed it.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit ! did you bring the wine ? a texas song,

[Jesus & Gypsy Soul]

Lol strangely enough, I got the wine right here! :) cheers.

[wordman]

i should have known ! and here i am in tennessee and you in texas,oh well cheers to you !

[WastedTime]

I can tell you're a strong man, like a watchful musky ox watching over the prairie at dusk... ensuring the safety of all the musky oxen under your watchful musky eye....

Such a gross enjoyment of pleasure it was, of mine, to read you my sweet musky ox of a man....

I will treasure it forever in your graceful memory.

[Aprille]

I let you go
and now my heart is broken
The rain is falling,
now I'm crying
---
And now I wanna go to Georgia to see the cold rainy night. It's just that there are times that the rain keeps on reminding us of people we should have never let go.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit !

[Aprille]

my pleasure. :)

[Star Wolf]

A very romantic. There is always something that brings that special someone to mind, that someone who we should have never let go. If only......haunt. Fabulous write!

[wordman]

thank you for the visit !

[Nisreen]

somehow that special person is always remembered when it rains
a relief

well done

[wordman]

thank you very much riversided,good to see you !

[pammy55]

HansJizzy and ANTO are one and the same. ANTO blocked someone who had never commented on his stuff, at exactly the same time as HansJizzy did.

avoid! avoid!

[wordman]

anto is not hans jizzy aka t k little aka david demers,you have one post and one friend
you don`t know me from adam,i would figure you as demers..anto hates his guts as most of us here do !

[richy]

Great read and thanks especially for introducing me to this song. It's so good.

[wordman]

great song,fair poem,thanks for the visit !

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

People say love hurts if lost. I feel love really hurts, when its rain falling like skyafall....
Beuatiful Poem Wordman :)

[wordman]

thank you very much !