Rainy Night in Georgia

Color me gray

as the sky fades to black

color me sad

on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia

takes a toll,

as the rain

falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart

i need you to hold

i need you to touch me baby

touch my soul

I guess 

i should have never let you go

now i feel you sweet heart

deep down in my soul

You see 

true love never dies

and as i stand here in the rain

my heart still cries ...

Reviews

[GreenShoes]

A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.

[wordman]

thank you karen,lol,learn something every day..never heard of a scale,but it sounds nice
i am a total ameatur

[Jesus & Gypsy Soul]

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.

[wordman]

just let it come from the heart,break the rules

[Terrence Chang]

Great write Wordman. Keep it up

[wordman]

and how are you my friend ! thanks

[Terrence Chang]

I am fine and dandy

[Miss Sharon]

Returning to ask for a new write Ron. This one was written in December. I'm having withdrawal pains! ~SP

[wordman]

i am dried up sharon ! no inspiration ,maybe you could give me a start

[mou]

Reflection of a deep feelings..I appreciate your writings..good rhythm with nice flow...

[wordman]

thank you for stopping by !

[Kenneth The Poet]

Very good. Like a love song from years back.

[wordman]

thank you kenneth

[E G TEN]

A fine piece of writing Ron, you Southerners realy are hopeless romantics'
Georgia is on my mind in thjs cool melodic poem. Thanks EG

[Insight "MH"]

The whole poem is lovely, but last verse is an epic one, well done!

[wordman]

thank you insight,appreciate the visit !

[Danny-Dark0]

Love this. It touches a certain sentimental part of me, a part I never knew existed in this heartless entity haha, will keep an eye out for more of your work.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit! they usually touch me after i write them.

[Great Aunt Astri]

A poignant poem. True love lingers on, even in the rain. I like your near rhymes.

[wordman]

and i thank you!