Rainy Night in Georgia

Rainy Night in Georgia

A Poem by wordman
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Color me gray
as the sky fades to black
color me sad
on this cold rainy night

Rainy night in georgia
takes a toll,
as the rain
falls on my soul

I miss you sweet heart
i need you to hold
i need you to touch me baby
touch my soul

I guess 
i should have never let you go
now i feel you sweet heart
deep down in my soul

You see 
true love never dies
and as i stand here in the rain
my heart still cries ...



© 2017 wordman



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A lovely poem indeed.

A couple suggestions?
All your stanzas have an ABCB rhyme scheme except for the first one. You might want to change the last line in that 1st stanza to something like, "I want my sweetheart back"

Also, I know spelling doesn't count in poetry, in fact, you can even make up your own words, but the last word on the last line should be cries.



Posted 2 Years Ago


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Jesus & Gypsy Soul

2 Years Ago

Great critiquing. I need to learn these scales too.
 wordman

2 Years Ago

just let it come from the heart,break the rules
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Very beautiful and well written. I enjoyed it. I loved how you said "Color me sad" as if "sad" has a color. Interesting.

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

oh yeah! it has a color,thank you !
Wow this is an amazing piece wordman...the flow of ur words and the emotion moves me...well done!!!

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

thank you micky,good to see you
Lovely song from lovely poet.

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

you are to kind,thank`s
This would go beautifully on acoustic guitar... pouring those feelings out my friend. You penned these words perfectly :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

just think what i could do if i had a bottle of bourbon,thank you
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

haha... that would only release the filter my friend :)
You always have the perfect piece of music. On this one I have to wonder if the song didn't spark the poem. It can be pouring when there's not a cloud in the sky.

Posted 2 Years Ago


 wordman

2 Years Ago

no i added the music after,i wrote the poem playing color my world,thank you
JayceeC

2 Years Ago

Oh wow, that's a gave too and I can see how it would have sparked this.
 wordman

2 Years Ago

half way through the write i played this one

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