Wrap me around your web strings of love as we swing across the dark evening sky above the city’s flickering lights while I -- hang on to your red and blue spandex knowing that every moment with you is a worthy, short-lived gamble;
a single cry for help can take you away from me
Ssshh~ Don’t speak. Let not our lips part ... Just for tonight, I will set you free from your eight-legged badge of responsibility
This is a cool little poem... I would say it is perfect, but if you meter it just a little more, it will be insane good... What a cool concept you created here. Do you write fiction also, or just poetry? Because I sense a little bit of story teller in you.. this piece had a lot of deep emotion for me in a small space.. Give it a try? Good job..
.. Misty
Thank you so much for the tip, Misty! I've never really learned poetry writing so I'm thankful for y.. read moreThank you so much for the tip, Misty! I've never really learned poetry writing so I'm thankful for your suggestion! I'm beginning to feel that it was a good choice to sign up here in writerscafe! Thank you so much!
Oh yes, I have tried writing fiction. I gave a shot at it first before poetry. :)
This is a cool little poem... I would say it is perfect, but if you meter it just a little more, it will be insane good... What a cool concept you created here. Do you write fiction also, or just poetry? Because I sense a little bit of story teller in you.. this piece had a lot of deep emotion for me in a small space.. Give it a try? Good job..
.. Misty
Thank you so much for the tip, Misty! I've never really learned poetry writing so I'm thankful for y.. read moreThank you so much for the tip, Misty! I've never really learned poetry writing so I'm thankful for your suggestion! I'm beginning to feel that it was a good choice to sign up here in writerscafe! Thank you so much!
Oh yes, I have tried writing fiction. I gave a shot at it first before poetry. :)
Is this a reference to Peter Parker! ? OMG this poem is so much win!! :D I really like the way you kept me in suspense till the end. Through this poem you have so aptly described what it is to really love Mr. P. I am also a huge fan :)
Hi Lee, the first person to ever review my first post here ^^
What you said are correct! I'm .. read moreHi Lee, the first person to ever review my first post here ^^
What you said are correct! I'm glad that it kept you in suspense, meaning it wasn't that obvious right from the start that I was pertaining to that guy. Haha. Thank you, I appreciate your review! This has been my first time writing a poem of such kind.