Winter Thoughts

Winter Thoughts

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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In Collaboration with Kesha...

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Winter Thoughts
The snow cascaded in front of her,
​f​
lakes landing on her lips,
​h​
er thoughts instantly went to him
​,​
​a​
nd that time he left her outside.

​Leaving, in that smokey aura
where winter leaves surrounded her.
Burying herself in a castle of emotions;
and there she sealed her heart​.


Turning the lock and throwing the key,
determined to leave her shattered mind behind.
Dancing with the snowflakes,
​s​
he disappeared into the night.

The night clouds enshrouded her very soul;
she questioned the mere thought 
of existing without him
​,​
 
as she came by the paths they'd crossed together, 
​wrapping​
 herself in the blanket of his warm thoughts
​.​
 

Her breathing became shallow,
a​
nd her thoughts were dark
​.​
Now wondering where it was he went to,
and why he 
​left​
 without ever saying good-bye.

​And in that moment she realized.
They'd never been one; but two separate beings,
and she was deluded into believing
that they were destined to be one...

She was unwilling to admit defeat,
however hurt that he ran with her heart,
with her head held high,
​ ​
and the moon as her guide,
​s​
he 
knew​​
 she 
would​
 be alright. 

Embracing these winter thoughts,
the night now smiled down at her
​;
 
​her nostalgia washed away​.

everything fell back to place; a blissful oblivion...​




© 2017 Dr. YumnaKay



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Seems this collaboration is both an emotional healing and learning experience; phrased almost perfectly as the one writer melts into the other's thoughts. When one learns from hurt, time lessens the scar.. and, life goes on. Perhaps.

Fine work, Kesha and Yumna.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Emma, for your appreciation of this collab and for your thoughtful words here. Glad you l.. read more
Kesha

5 Months Ago

Thank you very much Emma! :)



Reviews

Seems this collaboration is both an emotional healing and learning experience; phrased almost perfectly as the one writer melts into the other's thoughts. When one learns from hurt, time lessens the scar.. and, life goes on. Perhaps.

Fine work, Kesha and Yumna.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Emma, for your appreciation of this collab and for your thoughtful words here. Glad you l.. read more
Kesha

5 Months Ago

Thank you very much Emma! :)
Yes, oblivion certainly helps. But, emotions fade, and remembering the good times soothes the soul. However, you portray you feelings very well in your well (p)resented poem.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you for liking this collab. Truly appreciate your words 😊
Great Aunt Astri

5 Months Ago

Thank you, truly, to both of you.
Kesha

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much :)
I absolutely LOVE this!!! Not just because of the umbrella, although you know I'm quite partial to them!
Perfect imagery, great feel, passionate...
Wonderful read! Thank you for sharing! : )

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Anastasia Purvis

5 Months Ago

You're welcome. There's nothing really bad about umbrellas. They are aethestically pleasing, and nat.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Of course 😊
Kesha

5 Months Ago

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it :)
this is a beautifully written expression of truth and healing! I love everything about this! There comes a point in time when heartbreak heals in a way that doesn't dispel the memories of a breakup or a sudden separation, but sets them right.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

True indeed. Thank you, Mary, for liking this collaborative effort. :))
Kesha

5 Months Ago

Thank you Mary :)
Beautifully written. Powerful imagery. Sealing her heart to obtain the oblivion that soothes the suffering- we can see her frozen tears and we cry for her. Bravo!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you for your thoughts on this collab, Annette, and for liking. Truly appreciate it :)
Kesha

5 Months Ago

Thank you Annette :)
Aloha, a very pretty poem. Gracefully penned with thought and a delicate touch. The symbolic use of winter is very well done. I enjoyed the hopeful turn this took, as wonderful as it is to have love in the company of another it is equally beautiful to be at home in our own company and to understand the value of growing in our own skin. The run away lover in this tale had a lot more growing to do, and was not quite ready for all she could offer. Great job to you both. Izzy

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

I totally agree with your words. I like how you leave such beautiful and thoughtful words on reviews.. read more
Letting go of the pain and moving forward, that's something not every one can do. But to write such positive sentences for that pain that even if the surroundings are growing dark and the warmth that we had is no longer there at least we learn to understand that some people can stay in our hearts but not right beside us.
Truly it needs a lot of strength of the heart to admit such reality. And to describe loneliness as her only ally, letting the night comfort her and the moon telling her that even in the darkest places there will always be light to guide and hope to survive.
A very beautiful poem I felt connected with it. Thank you for sharing :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

That's very sweet of you 😊😘
Kesha

5 Months Ago

Thank you for such a wonderful review and for liking it so much :)
Luna

5 Months Ago

My pleasure :)
You and Kesha really bopped the nose of perfection on this one... Wonderful use of one of my favorite word-plays with "leaves" and "leaving"... Obliterating end... Vivid imagery painted with dismissal of fillers... Stunning emotion portrayed via artistic word choice... I am blissfully unaware of the lines separating me from him, or was a line ever in place to begin with... Smokingly penned... Kudos', both of you'z...

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Haha then give it a try and throw some lines my way and I'll try to keep up with you 😛😉
Silente

5 Months Ago

All right... I shall...
Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

I look forward to it 😊
One word 'disillusioned' is the fly in this otherwise excellent, deeply reflective and hopeful ointment.
It suggests to me, a 'passing of the buck' by the speaker - a sense of self-denial of blame, if you like. At worst it seems like she was misled.
I hate to be so seemingly anally retentive about that single word but I can't get past it. Its the fulcrum of her inner search and the result of the final analysis too.
(self) Deluded or disillusioned? That is the question...

I like the weaving of this piece and the overall hopefulness in the resolution. Great collab altogether guys!
:))



Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

I think you're right. Disillusioned seems to cause the opposite effect here...
Thank you, Ton.. read more
comfort in the black night...a soft snowflake turned to a heart of ice---and getting comfortable in her aloneness.
j.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Jacob, for the nice interpretation of this collab. 😊

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