A Disconnection of Hearts

A Disconnection of Hearts

A Poem by louanimal
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I wrote this a long time ago. Twist ending!

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I'm taken in again

your hostage, your victim

blind is the feeling of your heart on mine

This hot silence that dances around us

dulls my need to hold on, but I cling

not to a structured thought

not to doubt

but to you hear now.

This scent of home, taste of comfort

softly serenades me and I'm yours,

yours for the moment,

until your hers.

© 2012 louanimal


Author's Note

louanimal
I'm not sure about the punctuation in this one. I tried to make is as effective as possible.

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An Amazing write you have written.
Excellent write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


You're going fine if you are new..
If not than put in a little more effort...
The effort is excellent...

Posted 12 Years Ago


Do you know michael scott?

Posted 12 Years Ago


Excellent write. Really like this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


great write, it's short but has a lot of imagery, the ending was very good.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great poem :D
I think the punctuation is fine.
xx

Posted 12 Years Ago



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louanimal
louanimal

Scranton, PA



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