Twisted Game.

Twisted Game.

A Poem by A Risen Heroine.
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I once thought I was born to say
"I love you."

Yet I am sick;

Sick and tired of your twisted game

Left me breathless

Left me bleeding

Left me as an abandoned house.

 

 

The buttons on my phone are worn thin

Kept trying to get you back

You left me so easily

Did I mean anything to you?
In the end;

Did you even care?

 

 

I was just another girl

Just another piece,
Of your twisted game.

 

 

One of us is going down

I wont run

I will make a stand

You will be the one to fall.

© 2012 A Risen Heroine.


Author's Note

A Risen Heroine.
Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always.
Written back in february. (:

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I'll definitely give it a 9/10 for the core of the piece... Maybe I'm just partial to fanciful words so I might be biased. Make me feel the details of your soul in words... If you did that you would absolutely destroy ever other writer (myself included)

Posted 5 Years Ago


ok pls take no offence at my opinions...loved that idea of:
"Left me as an abandoned house." - and the repetition before that but it feels like it needs a tweak, i.e. left {me}like an abandoned house"..such a clever line that leaves me envious and then this last part:
"I will make a stand
You will be the one to fall." has you finding your strength with a great ending.. Pls tweak - it's so worthwhile and your potential amazes.. feel free to crit mine:)

Posted 5 Years Ago


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"Left me as an abandoned house" Loved it :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


We should never bother chasing those who don't put in the proper effort to keep us around. I've experienced this first-hand for about 2 years. I was the only one caring, he never made time for me, never bothered calling or texting back. We all have to figure out what we deserve and not that we deserve those who just give us the occasional attention when we want or need it. We are worth more than someone's attention. It's better to end things if you feel you are losing your happiness or your worth.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Honest Opinion I Went Through This Game Before So I Can Remember What It Felt Like I Like How Your Poems Give Me A Sense Of Nostalgia
Keep Up The Good Work Dude

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like the ending to the poem. Good to stand your ground. I like the description and honest emotion in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


Powerful, emotional and very relatable indeed...
fantastic :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Awwwww I love :) so sad...and so true. It's wonderfully written and shows your emotions quite clearly

Posted 7 Years Ago



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