Blood Strewn Across The Walls.

Too many thought

Too many feelings

Too much pressure;

Never been a kid, really.

 

 

Never really made a stand

Always alone

Everyone seem to avoid me

What have I done to you?

 

 

Mind aches

Feeling my heart slow down

Heart sliced out as a throat of a slaughtered lamb

Blood strewn across the walls.

Author's Note

Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always~

Reviews

[Jeremy Baker]

Quite brutal, which I hadn't anticipated. Imagery was awesome and strong. Great write!

[Marie Harrison]

Wow! Definately bloody.
Very mysterious poem to me.
What caused the bloodshed?

[light and ashes]

Wonderful poem. The ending adds intensity to it.

I like this one a lot. starts out really strong. You start with a flow, then you change it. This can be distracting to some readers. If I may, break the next to last line into two lines. It will add more 'punch' to your ending. Excellent work.

[Hello, Goodbye]

solid write.. hate to say it, but if you go outside yourself with some the vocab and imagery.. this could be taken to a whole different level.. really good write..

[Cherrie Palmer]

Very nice delivery

[Carrion.]

like the toxicinity chick. Brutal honesty.
love it.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

This is brutal honesty right here. Each one of your poems show a different side to everything but the way this poem reflects upon is the pain one endures when so many mistakes can not be comprehended. Good job!

[Becky C Strukamp]

Another powerful and emotional write. You have an edge for that. Excellent.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Wow. Very good! its quite deep. It's hard being a loner sometimes. This poem is relatable. i know how it feels.. *sigh* Love love it! =) Wonderful.. it flows well. And you can definately tell the pain here. Great write!