Prelude

Prelude. Enjoy.

 The sun stopped shining, the sky covered by black clouds.

  Birds stopped singing. Insects quieted.

  Lights flashed. Cars stopped. Computers crashed. Digital clocks began a countdown.

  24:00

 

  00:00

  The black clouds cleared, a red sky behind them.

  Black Sun and Red Sky.

  An eclipse? No, the sun was black. Giving off a strange light.

  The apocolypse? No, just the dawn of a new era.

  The black sun, a calling, an awakening, for the desendants. Waking tp the souls oof those few chosen people who's blood is strongest, mind is most powerful and heart is pure.

  In their blood, in their veins was nosferatu.

  At the sight of the black, coma took them.

  Digital clocks began the countdown once more.

  12:00

 

  00:00

  Screams of pain filled the air at hospitals. The awakening changing the chosen ones from the inside, out.

  The screams stopped, moniters showed doctors that they should be dead. Yet there in a hospital bed, sat a desendant, weither they knew it or not. They were unrecognizable from when they were admitted. 

  Test were done. Results unbelievable.

  No longer could they eat food. They appered to be food posion if they did.

  Soon they're hunger could no longer be contained.

  An innocent doctor or nurse. Perhaps even an unsuspecting visitor, became prey.Food.

  No one died though. They're instincts told them to stop.

  Bood was what they needed. Blood was what they got.

  They were dubbed vampires.

 

  There was one in a hundred thousand chances of be changed into one. There were only ten in Shore City.

 

  Vampire weren't the only thing unded to awaken.

  Zombies too crawled and clawed their way from their graves. They're bites infectous, like a plague.

  Wall and fences were set up around homes and cities. Town and settlements.

  Animals were attacked when humans were unavailable. Those animals became ghouls. Mutated animals, undead abominations. They were faster, stronger, and more intelligent than they're living kin. The ghouls were the real problem not the zombies. But they made the problem worse. 

Author's Note

Say anything is there are problems. Hope you like this, I had to edit the other one.

Reviews

[obsidianblood]

I look forward to more. I enjoyed the new ideas. I would suggest that you pay closer attention to word choice. For example, "comatose" is an adjective, not a noun and "eminent" is a person who stands above others (they call the pope "your Eminence"). "Imminent" is the word you want (ready to take place, hanging, threateningly, over one's head).

[Art300]

Well it has my attention,good work.

[Sunny Skye]

wow this is good exactly what im looking for.
keep up the good work!

[Drow]

Wow...I must say it's better, though I did catch a few spelling mistakes. I feel inclined to ask whether or not your spell check is broken as well, lol.
Great job though