my rain

transfixed by the rain

that lashes down around me

drowning memories

lightning flashes far away

...............................

transformed by the rain´s

enchanting patterns

gentle splish-splash rhythm motion

heavy over flow

...................

my rain falls steady

soaks me blissful

drenching clothes and seeping

cold beneath my skin

.........................

can´t you feel the rain reach over to me

clouds gorgeous cover

over constant seas

of pounding wave and sparkle change

.............................................

now i watch the death mask

rain washes all the rest away

ninety-nine day fever growing

see can you walk away

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I find, if you will it, that the words almost scarce, make the reader feel the imagery rather than exchange thought for letters. A truly conective piece, making assumtions, but not exact, well done.

[Brandi Nicole]

very nice structure and presentation.....well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

Great description of rain. I like the story in this poem. Rain had the power to create life and destroy a complete city in seconds. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Rosallia]

Wow. This grows in intensity as it progresses. And that last stanza took my breath away! Great job =)

[Becky Clancy]

I like it ^_^b

[Amila Jay]

Ahhhhh.. that rain!! . Great Poem .. Very very nice :))

[Jed Sabffle]

wow. filled with deep emotions.
I really love the subject and how you put great details about it.
well-crafted poem!
keep writing!
: )

[hopelessromantic]

nice

[MandaBear]

Beautifully emotional piece. Nicely done.