truth

Look at me

look me in the eyes

please, don't shift your gaze

what do you have to say? Tell me

please, tell me, what are you hiding?

I know it's there, it's hiding under your lashes

please, oh please part your lips and let me know

i reach for your face, touch my fingertips to your cheek

the impossible tears drip down my fingers, across my knuckles

they slide across my palm and whimper pathetically down my wrists

you drop you gaze to the tears that slip and peel my fingers from your

seeping eyes please don't tell me to leave just tell me the the truth, oh the truth

you sigh and press your hand to my jaw, now damp with unsaid tears

the words are glistening on your lips, begging, begging let them

free, free, free, you pull me close, your nose nuzzles the ruffle

of my knotted hair 'its okay, it's okay' but the words are

unheard yes they are unheard but much too loud

your breath is warm to the chill of my pain

please, love tell me, please just tell me

what words do you fear the most

what words make you ache

breath your life into me

part your sad lips

darling help me

tell the truth

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

almost looks like a jack-o-lantern's eye...very haunting.

it fits with my version of the poem...the truth...this begins with short lines and expands to the one in the middle, which is the longest...the truth only stretches so far, then retracts...please don't say anything that is outside of this boundary...i want to believe you...but i am watching your eyes...the truth lies there.

jacob

[AleyshaRosa]

I love your viewpoint on this poem-- your understanding of the shape. It's always interesting to me at how others grasp my work.
Thank you for the review, I appreciate your perspective. =]

[Pax]

fascinating write my friend...the format is indeed awesome...i always like concrete poetry and you nailed it...its seem the poem is about hidden love..otherwise this is great...

[AleyshaRosa]

Hidden love indeed, Pax.
Thanks, thought I'd give cp a shot. =]

[RachelReaper]

the format of this is awesome and the poem was very eye catching and interesting to look at and to read. As always, I'm blown away.

[AleyshaRosa]

As always, Thanks Rachel

[RachelReaper]

:D

[Steven]

Ah, cool! I like how the beginning and end are fast, like their form, and spin into and out of the centripetal force of the middle. An ache, really, to hear hidden words. Dug it.

[AleyshaRosa]

Thanks ya, thank ya, thank ya Steven

[Steven Cash]

Wowwww powerful

And I love the shape too!

[AleyshaRosa]

Yay, the shape did its duty =]
Thanks

[Faffy]

O.O this is great! i love the way you have this moment in time with an amazing selection of words and carefully constructed it into such a unique structure 100/100 just wont cut it

[AleyshaRosa]

Thank you so much, Roshan
I was trying something i never had before and tried to construct a poem into a shape, I hope it brought more interest to the poem.
Appreciate the review, as always

[Faffy]

any time but the structure helped bend time in the poem the moment you made just seem to slow down as action become bigger and bigger and the descriptions became more vivid it was magical in a way =P

[Faffy]

oh and the review is meant to say the way you have captured this moment in time

[AleyshaRosa]

Wow, thanks again =]

Glad it worked, then

[AleyshaRosa]

Yeah, I assumed so =P