Opium

Opium

A Poem by Jeannette Lunete

Not positioned and untouched

Darkness was a transit for poised nonchalance

The shell was healed, yet still undone

 

Hidden and transferred into blind pupils

The light was funelling towards demolished thrills

 

If eternity embraces time

His lips will still split a rhyme

A dome sheltered in imprisoned pride

 

A roulette of syllables melting down his spine

Floating down her throat, like poisoned wine

© 2016 Jeannette Lunete


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Sorrow overwhelms my senses when I think of all the friends I've known who were taken by opium (and other derivatives, thereof) in my youth and over the ensuing years.
It's a slowww, torturous death no one benefits by.
What amazingly metaphorical power, emotion, and imagery your very skilled pen has scribed for our entertainment, impact, and awe.

I am a dedicated admirer of Free Verse, and this is about as good as it gets … you're the real deal.
Thank you ever-so gratefully for laying it on us, Jeannette! ⁓ Richard 🍃

(L5, check "funneling")

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jeannette Lunete

1 Year Ago

Thank you Richard!
Richard 🍃

1 Year Ago

Jeannette, you're sincerely welcome. : )
Please, drop by my place for a read … I'd like tha.. read more
Oh I loove the metaphors and the imagery in this, nothing excite me more in poetry like a well painted, heartfelt imagery, bravo

Posted 3 Years Ago


mmmmmmm i read the power of the poet who handles words well ...addictive and we are always chasing after them ... closing lines are so exquisite i almost want to feel the poison :-O
like reading Poe
E.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot E. ! :)
Goodness! This is exquisite- dark-deep-devastatingly beautiful

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jeannette Lunete

4 Years Ago

Thanks Wondering Mind :)

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