The Tune Changes

Look at that one lonely valley.
When the sun rises,
along with the vermilion beams
a soft vibrant song  spreads
all over it.

When the sun sets ,
the moon shows up
 for the habitual evening walk.
An echoing, melancholic song
drenches the vale .
A silvery syrup is made in the black bowl
called 'The Night' ,
and as the fluent fluid hits the dark wall,
the wind column keeps churning out
the song- the Anthem of Void .

The tune changes its apparel again,
When the sun rises.

Reviews

[ElizaB]

Thank you for entering my competition.

Straight away you set the mood, tone and place. I walk along with your words in hand, as lovely and languid as the moon you so beautifully depict.

My favourite lines being:
'A silvery syrup is made in the black bowl
called 'The Night'

It is us who make the night, in the sense that we call it. We have given it a charm of its own, a charm which you portray so lovingly.

[Anand Sehgal]

Thanks so very much. I feel really honored to receive your comments :)

[Kasey Miriam]

Lovely poem with vivid images wonderfully written

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks so very much Kasey :)

[Kasey Miriam]

you are very welcome

[melissa]

This is a great poem keep up the great work i can't wait to read more

[Anand Sehgal]

thank you so much Melissa for the kind review :)

[melissa]

Your welcome

[Madalyn Beck]

I could see these images clearly! You have a beautiful write here! Good job! (:

[Anand Sehgal]

thank you so very much dear Madalyn :)

[s y e]

Your imagery is really beautiful and the poem as a whole was simply divine. I loved this!

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks so very much dear :)

[Linda alexander]

Reader can see the same images with same clarity and intensity, excellent imagery and even can see as simile to phases and changes in life too, there are plenty of dark walls and anthem of void in life too, enjoyed

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks so very much dear :)

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care my friend

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Short and very readable, great imagery, well done.

[Anand Sehgal]

thank you Thomas for the time you spent on the piece :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is beautiful Anand.Your images are so vivid and your lines so clear :)

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks so very much dear Vidya :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Anand :)

[MsJewel]

You have created some lovely images for the reader to enjoy. I love the melancholy feel of this one my friend. Stellar writing!

:) Julie

[Anand Sehgal]

I am honored. Love back :)

[DIVYA]

An exquisite creation on the rythms of the diurnal cycle. I loved the imagery and refreshing descriptions in this writing. Thanks for sharing.

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks for reading dear Divya :) Love back :)