What's Intact

I take my steps out to face the fact,
The clouds are waiting to join the act,
On meadows wide as the skies above,
I tread with firm core virtues intact.

Blood of distaste from damaged flesh hacked,
Rests somewhere beneath this surface cracked,
Water would not reach this forgotten gap,
To clean the small blemish lying intact.

If I inhaled a scent so abstract,
It smoothly passed through a virtual tract,
Would it rain a dream or just deja vu,
Where imagination still lies intact.

Meanwhile outside I welcome the rain,
To dampen fiery facts I face again,
The gentle breeze brings calmness to enact,
Stormy restlessness remaining intact.

Reviews

[Umar Aziz]

In pronouncing any judgment I stick to the judicial reasoning without bringing my own discretionary power blindly. This poem is great and comprehends well the human nature within. Hence this judgment is being backed up with a decree. A copy of the final order shall be pasted soon outside this Tribunal Court.

[Archishman Rick]

Haha that's reassuring indeed. Appreciate the review, thank you very much 🙏

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

A superb poem in fab rhyme scheme, with the rain and storm theme with sublime abstract musings. Kudos.

Plz do read and comment my newest poem too , right on top of my page

[Archishman Rick]

Thanks you very much friend 🙏 I'll happily read your work. Cheers

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"would it rain a dream or just deja vu" is a really nice line.
I like the rhyme scheme and flow of this.
I relate to this quite a bit...a very "stormy restlessness" has encumbered me
during this time of the pandemic...
I like this work.
j.

[Archishman Rick]

Appreciate the nice review, thank you very much 🙏

[John the Baptist]

I get the feeling the speaker here is one who has passed through some kind of ordeal, one that did considerable damage, but in the end was unable to break the spirit. The speaker seems to be rallying, regaining strength, and may in the end be stronger for having passed through this rough stretch.

[Archishman Rick]

Appreciate your nice review. Thank you very much 🙏

[Miss Marlette]

Very many storms, fires and rains go on inside but virtues make you come out intact. Internal struggle interesting. Nice one Archishman.

[Archishman Rick]

Appreciate the nice review. Thank you very much 🙏

[Einstein Noodle]

I think the title and repeating theme in each fourth line makes this a nicely packaged poem. V1 for me is the best .. using the clouds as a uniting factor makes me feel that natural world connection .. i also think your use of personifications with nature is clear ... stating the trials and troubles one will encounter throughout life .. they are ,,,"as perennial as the grass" Max Ehrmann's "Desiderata" ;)
E.

[Archishman Rick]

Much appreciated, Mr. E. Thank you for your review. I shall definitely check that one out, thanks for mentioning :) Regards.

[Chris Shaw]

I have always found the rainfall cleansing and refreshing after stormy interludes. The imagination though, will remain all powerful. Good to read you again Archisman Rick.

Chris

[Archishman Rick]

Really appreciate you stopping by and giving your generous review, Ms. Christine. It is literally intensely stormy and rainy here in Bengal owing to a cyclone that has whipped up.
Warm regards.