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She Couldn't Dance

She Couldn't Dance

A Poem by AJNJ
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He who cannot dance puts the blame on the floor ~ Hindu Proverb

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In the kingdom of many boos 
there once lived a danseuse 
who just couldn’t dance

With her two twisted feet 
So she hid her hooves

Hemming and hawing 
at the drummer’s beat
Scared, that the public 
would make her vamoose
she made up one after 
another lame excuse
One day she’d say 
the darn music was wrong
Another day she’d say 
the wind was too damn strong
Some days she’d curse   
the swinging stage door
Yet most often she blamed 
the gleaming dance floor 
This lady always had a ruse
Oh what an absolute goose 
this oblique, obtuse danseuse

© 2020 AJNJ


Author's Note

AJNJ
"A Bad Workman Always Blames His Tools"

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It's a clever proverb you lead into the poem with, as is the more common English proverb in your Author's note. It's a sad fact of life that there are many dancers who blame the floor for their own inadequacies. If they seriously bothered to learn and address their mistakes, instead of hiding behind them and blaming all and sundry, then perhaps they would become much better dancers instead of dragging along with two left feet. It's a smart poem, Pestonjee, and one which can be related to many facets of life in general. Exit stage left, perhaps? Original writing and well conveyed.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

8 Months Ago

Thank you Mr. Picasso.
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8 Months Ago

You are wonderfully welcome, Pestonjee!
AJNJ

8 Months Ago

You too dear sir :)



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The rhyming is just absolutely great, I absolutely LOVE that aspect. And I love the way you refer to her feet as hooves! It really gives off the feeling of her tripping over her own feet. I see a lot of words used very smartly here that I don't normally see being used, and that makes it even better. It even sounds like a good idea for a full book or movie!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

4 Months Ago

Wow! A full book! I'd love to do that. I did try to be as original as possible here and I am thrille.. read more
Colacat

4 Months Ago

It definitely is far more original than a lot that I've seen! I'm definitely subscribing (:
AJNJ

4 Months Ago

Thanks a ton and more, my friend :)
Nice.

It might be unrelated, but it reminds me of someone who actually really couldn't dance. That's why I like poetry (among many other reasons): other people's words can trigger memories, and help us revisit, re-evaluate events in our life.

So, thanks for that!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

5 Months Ago

Thanks a ton for such a thoughtful review!
Ah!! witty you are but clever ..well depicted ..the person blaming everyone and everything but her .there is a hindi version of the proverb you have mentioned , which says 'naach na jane ,angan tedha'.and i think your work clearly depicts that .smartly written;)
Love, Ankita

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

5 Months Ago

Mumbai mostly...and you? Noida?
Ankita Dwivedi

5 Months Ago

Yeah .. I am just a student .
:)
AJNJ

5 Months Ago

Okay ......😀
I have to agree with your author's note, Pestonjee. Too many blame their inadequacies on other things to mask their own incompetence. And so it appears to be here in the theme of this poem. It is one thing to not be able to dance and accept that, its another thing entirely to fake it or blame others for your two left feet. Whoever it involves, well....two left feet always results in falls. Original work here, Pestonjee.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

6 Months Ago

Thanks a ton, Ms. Inessa! Your observations are spot on and I agree that dancing is best left to tho.. read more
So well expressed and beautifully written. The use of English has been great! Keep going!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

7 Months Ago

Thank you very much PRERANA! I really appreciate your kind words 🤗
This is a well-expressed & meaningful poem, but it's hard for me not to wonder if I've not just read three poems in a row that are related to this vengeance you seem to have against a certain writer. I hope you can focus on something other than this pretty soon becuz you are letting a dumb fixation define your writing when you throw down 3 poems in a row circling the same rant. Show us you are about more than just pointing out how someone doesn't measure up to your standards (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

7 Months Ago

Of course Ms. Barley! As I already said before, your heartfelt words have been absorbed and apreciat.. read more
barleygirl

7 Months Ago

Thank you for understanding & good luck on a book!
She wouldn't dance. Nothing can beat a passionate danseuse, maybe destroyed a couple of times but never defeated..

"Quand on veut, on peut."

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

7 Months Ago

Thanks for your inspirational words.
Nice flow to this one :) Indeed, if one is to execute their passion for art of any vein, they have to work for it and lay excuses to the wind so to speak...nicely done pestonjee...

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

7 Months Ago

Thanks a lot for appreciating this poem, Ms. Ruth...
Very interesting poem. I enjoyed it.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

8 Months Ago

Thank you very much, my friend.
JungLee

8 Months Ago

You are welcome. Please check out my new poem c:
great word play in this, Pestonjee, the way she dances around not dancing was very clever, you have sense of wit and humour in your twinkle toes and a sense of rhythm in your musical beat good poem

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AJNJ

7 Months Ago

Some poems just come to us in a flash and leave words dancing across the page. There's very little w.. read more

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