She Couldn't Dance

She Couldn't Dance

A Poem by Pestonjee
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He who cannot dance puts the blame on the floor ~ Hindu Proverb

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In the kingdom of many boos 
there once lived a danseuse 
who just couldn’t dance

With her two twisted feet 
So she hid her hooves

Hemming and hawing 
at the drummer’s beat
Scared, that the public 
would make her vamoose
she made up one after 
another lame excuse
One day she’d say 
the darn music was wrong
Another day she’d say 
the wind was too damn strong
Some days she’d curse   
the swinging stage door
Yet most often she blamed 
the gleaming dance floor 
This lady always had a ruse
Oh what an absolute goose 
this oblique, obtuse danseuse

© 2020 Pestonjee


Author's Note

Pestonjee
"A Bad Workman Always Blames His Tools"

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It's a clever proverb you lead into the poem with, as is the more common English proverb in your Author's note. It's a sad fact of life that there are many dancers who blame the floor for their own inadequacies. If they seriously bothered to learn and address their mistakes, instead of hiding behind them and blaming all and sundry, then perhaps they would become much better dancers instead of dragging along with two left feet. It's a smart poem, Pestonjee, and one which can be related to many facets of life in general. Exit stage left, perhaps? Original writing and well conveyed.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

2 Months Ago

Thank you Mr. Picasso.
Brilliance

2 Months Ago

You are wonderfully welcome, Pestonjee!
Pestonjee

2 Months Ago

You too dear sir :)



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So well expressed and beautifully written. The use of English has been great! Keep going!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

1 Week Ago

Thank you very much PRERANA! I really appreciate your kind words 🤗
This is a well-expressed & meaningful poem, but it's hard for me not to wonder if I've not just read three poems in a row that are related to this vengeance you seem to have against a certain writer. I hope you can focus on something other than this pretty soon becuz you are letting a dumb fixation define your writing when you throw down 3 poems in a row circling the same rant. Show us you are about more than just pointing out how someone doesn't measure up to your standards (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

1 Month Ago

Of course Ms. Barley! As I already said before, your heartfelt words have been absorbed and apreciat.. read more
barleygirl

1 Month Ago

Thank you for understanding & good luck on a book!
She wouldn't dance. Nothing can beat a passionate danseuse, maybe destroyed a couple of times but never defeated..

"Quand on veut, on peut."

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

1 Month Ago

Thanks for your inspirational words.
Nice flow to this one :) Indeed, if one is to execute their passion for art of any vein, they have to work for it and lay excuses to the wind so to speak...nicely done pestonjee...

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Pestonjee

1 Month Ago

Thanks a lot for appreciating this poem, Ms. Ruth...
Very interesting poem. I enjoyed it.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

1 Month Ago

Thank you very much, my friend.
JungLee

1 Month Ago

You are welcome. Please check out my new poem c:
great word play in this, Pestonjee, the way she dances around not dancing was very clever, you have sense of wit and humour in your twinkle toes and a sense of rhythm in your musical beat good poem

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

1 Month Ago

Some poems just come to us in a flash and leave words dancing across the page. There's very little w.. read more
I frowned and smiled start to finish with your words. Went from the dancer's part then from the spectator's. Seems dancing askew is easy to do., especially rhymed with a grin on your face, rather than a flitting on stage. Perhaps. Question: when writing this .. could you see the dance movements first or.. the words?

Near missed your Author's note..

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

1 Month Ago

Yes, much to learn....for us all...I'm doing my best to survive. It's a daily battle in a city under.. read more
emmajoy

1 Month Ago

The virus seems able to attack from all sides and not enough is being done to control it. Individual.. read more
Pestonjee

1 Month Ago

Yes! They've left us to our own devices. The opening up means we build our own bunkers. Thanks...ple.. read more
Enchanting writing style, fit for a tale.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

1 Month Ago

Thanks a lot my friend.
Dancing always looks easy when others are doing it, but hey, rave music, you just jump in rhythm with the rest of the crowd. I myself like dancing up to the bar and getting a drink, and the sooner i get back to it the better.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

1 Month Ago

Yes...dancing comes easy after a few...Without it, I just come off looking like I'm desperately tryi.. read more
When I dance (which is a rare event) I'm all fingers and toes! (If you see what I mean)

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pestonjee

2 Months Ago

Trying to visualize that now... :)
Thanks a lot for the visit!

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