Can you begin to comprehend?

It's awful. But I've decided to post it anyways. Hah.

Sitting here, breathlessly screaming your name-
Can you hear me?

 

The tears roll down my cheeks; no one to blame-
Can you see them?

Cold and wondering if it was all just a mindless aim-
Can you understand?

Like death, the last flicker of the flame-
Can you sense it?

Letting go, never to look back, such a shame-
Can you begin to comprehend?

 

No.

 

You know nothing-
it was just a game.
 

Author's Note

Hm?

Reviews

[Silvario]

wow. not at all awful. in fact. i really enjoyed it. very well penned. this is a powerful piece all packed into a little package. you reveal a rather strong message in only so many words. that takes talent.

im not the best at interperating poetry but i see one whos been hurt by someone who perhaps in the end left and made it seem as if he/she didnt take the relationship seriously and doesnt care how the person they left feels.

anywho, well done indeed :)

[TadKent]

Ominous and foreboding but deep, honest and raw. Your emotions and questions here are so strong and gripping. I often use these kind of emotions too write the music I write. You've definitely grasped them. Well done,love. :)

[my life in black and wh..]

good poem. great flow. putting your emotions into words, is probably the biggest thing that i have trouble with as a writer.

great poem.

[my life in black and wh..]

:/

[San Herman Lopez a.k.a...]

Very nice... I feel every word. Your feeling really come thru. Or mmaybe it's because I could relate to every line. Truly an amazing piece.