Hate kills

Why is it you are in my face?

I'm so sick and tired of your disgrace!

 

It's hard to ignore my hate,

but we're both here. It must be fate.

 

Stayy over there and I'll stay over here.

Please, be quiet. Don't hurt my ears.

 

Stupid words just flowing out.

I can't do anything, but sit and pout.

 

The anger builds and the steam does rise.

Looking at you now, I don't believe my eyes.

 

You took too many, and you're on the ground.

I rush over as my heart starts to pound.

 

Pick up the phone, and 9-1-1 I call.

They say they're coming and I let the phone fall.

 

Is it my hate that caused this demise?

Why can't this time just fly by?

 

They need to hurry, I don't want her to die.

Paramedics  though the door and I cry, "Oh, my!"

Reviews

[JENY]

Very true feelings..
Depicted in the form of a poem….
Really fascinating…

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Love the flow, Very good poem

[SusanB]

Good write, pretty intense.

[PaperHearts]

A very intriguing concept! This was original, creative, and definitely hard-hitting. I really liked the way in which the intensity of the piece culminated, as it seemed to grow and grow and grow towards the final climax at the end of the piece. I found that the rhyming was a little forced at times, but other than that, this was an excellent piece. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Rosalyn Marie]

Very good. dark and chilling, but I like it. I love how the subject matter is dark, but it's written in couplet form, which is usually only in happy poems. I do that alot too when I write dark poems, like one I just wrote but it's currently untitled... Out of the 3 read requests, this is my favorite :D