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the pact

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Fade in: from black

 

[character ]: [Melanie]

[character]: [Azrael]

 

[In a mid-sized country town. melanie and azreal are both sitting in azreals bedroom listening to music, and the thunderstorms outside]

Azrael: its alright to come over when they are asleep…[looks up from her cut wrists and stares at melanie] …its not like they would ever hurt you…

Melanie: [sitting cross-legged on the floor beside the bed where Azrael is sitting on] if you say so…[says in a sigh]

Azrael: [slowly runs hands across her wrist before down Melanie's neck and feels her neck vain and smiles in small delight. then pulls on melanies hair so Melanie's head goes back and is looking up at azreal] you know i would never want to see you get hurt, not by anybody…[says in almost a demented purr]

[music continues and then violent banging goes on in the next room outside of the bedroom door. a man and a woman scream back and forth vulgerlary.]

Azrael: [flinches and holds her knees to her chest letting out a soft breath] i don’t want this anymore

Melanie: [stares at door expecting it to slam open at any given moment and can hear car tires screeching in her mind] i don’t either…its torture

Azreal: you know how most people do it you know [smiles deviously and pulls a bottle of sleeping pills out from under her pillow]

Melanie: [gives a wide eye expression and her face gets serious] you cant be serious az, that is just horrible [stares up at azreal from under her bangs]

Azrael: [continues smiling, not even responding to melanies body language] suicide my dear. [jiggles pill bottle making it rattle] did you know more than 30,000 people in america kill themselves a year? [holds bottle down and reads the label] 17% of them do it by overdose…[shrugs] why not?

Melanie: [fidgets with her black chipping fingernail polish and nods slowly] i have thought about it [turns body and lays on carpet, staring up at the dim ceiling light, the fan on the lowest setting]

[man and woman continue to argue]

Melanie: i have thought about it, ever since it happened….[closes eyes]

Azrael: [stands up and puts hand on her hips, her hair swinging slightly] since hes gone, there is nobody you are responsible for…[smirks and gets down onto ground and touches melanies cheek] its only you and i, if we die, you can be with him forever, and you wont feel the guilt anymore [fighting back a smile]

Melanie: [opens eyes staring up at Azrael, forcing away the tears she needs to cry and barely speaks, unaudioble] okay…we can do it together…

Azrael: because pain doesn't hurt when its all you've ever felt

 

CUT: into a dissolve

Reviews

[Inyourshadow]

Very nice use of description and depth of dark imagery, like how you repeated the fact of the argument going on in the other room. The pain really shows through the piece, especially the ending and the opening. I feel they may still have more to say, keep em' coming.

Silent Hill seriously

[Demonz]

Azrael's last line made sense to me. I've cut before and my life...It sucks.
Pain really does not hurt when it's all you ever felt. But that's only if you TRULY believe that will stop and numb the pain.
Write more of this. Please? :D

[Emunah June.]

That last line was....wow....I dont know how to react to that....I kinda wanna know what happens next :3