Of Something Great

Much like the value of sand

            Of an hour glass

            Is in the purpose of each grain

Such are we

We are the shore

            Of something great    

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

BRILLIANT! An hour glass is in waiting, patiently drumming it grains as one by one they move silently near in visibly - sharing is allowed their dream of time and motion. Your words conjur up thoughts. could but would never dare play over and over with one grain's contest without another as if time vying with its length at different times of year or/and life.

'We are the shore of something great': perhaps from which we move forward in time, in discovery? Perhaps.

Goodness, your words inspire thoughts I didn't know I had Thank you for sharing

[Brad Dehler]

I adore what you wrote about me inspiring your thoughts. That is so cool. Thank you Thank you! I like where your mind goes and how it sifts through the particles. Cheers Emma :)

[Quietstorm]

Love this piece ✨short and speaks volumes

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you Quietstorm! much appreciated

[Quietstorm]

You're welcome

[Insatiable Writer]

Each grain of sand in an hour glass is a representation of the time we have, the purpose being to enjoy every second until the final countdown, finding purpose, joy, love, etc. This is beautifully written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and if we can withstand the tide of life and flow with it rather than against it...
we definitely serve a purpose greater than ourselves..it takes all of the grains of sand to make up a beach.
j.

[Brad Dehler]

Yes Jacob! Absolutely. Seeing the big picture once capturing the minute

[Kim S.]

i like this, it's to the point, so nicely said

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you for your review, Becks

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I love this metaphor
It’s beautiful 🤩

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you Julie. Much appreciated

[Brad Dehler]

1. Starting with the value of sand, existentially like dirt/seemingly worthless
2. hour glass remark- then it turns the look on a micro level, importance in every grain
3. SUCH ARE WE, important individually
4. Then a sway (adding to) in focus to this importance- the grains making sand, making the shore
5. the shore then metaphoric as in the brink of greatness, the ocean, the water, the basis to life

[Allen Smuckler]

I liked the simplicity of this write, yet at the same time its profundity. Not an easy thing to accomplish.
If I can take the liberty I would tweak it a tad. I might eliminate "we are" and keep "the shore" as is, so it would read: Such are we
the shore
of something great
Also "sand of an hour glass" has been used and used again. perhaps another metaphor, or "
much like the value of sand
on Siesta Key",
Is in the purpose of each grain
It is your poem, and 'sands of an hour glass" does work. You should do what works for you... just my two cents.

[Allen Smuckler]

unfortunately the form did not show in my comment. If you care to see how I "visualized" it...I'll be happy to message you.

[Brad Dehler]

Hello. Thank you for your input. I contend otherwise. Each word is carefully chosen. Breaking this down:
1. Starting with the value of sand, existentially like dirt/seemingly worthless
2. hour glass remark- then it turns the look on a micro level, importance in every grain
3. SUCH ARE WE, important individually
4. Then a sway (adding to) in focus to this importance- the grains making sand, making the shore
5. the shore then metaphoric as in the brink of greatness, the ocean, the water, the basis to life

[Coyote Poetry]

I do agree. Each of a part of a large puzzle. I liked the logic of your words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Sami Khalil]

An inspirational poem about how we look at values, how we see things with or without magnification, how we all relate.

[lessa (kenzie)]

WOW, such a wonderful write, "like sand through an hour glass"
Amazing, love metaphor

[Brad Dehler]

thank you so much. I really like your encouragement