Tragic Past

If the sun falls down

there are other stars,

We may not survive,

But we know that we tried so hard.

If the water dries,

Then we won’t survive,

Nor will the animals,

Who came before us.

When the trees are dead,

We will only realize,

The mistakes we made,

For our selfish acts.

When the ice melts,

the animals will die,

They will only be a memory,

The memory of the tragic past.

Author's Note

Please give me suggestions to improve this. And remember that when everything goes away, we only realize their true meaning.

Reviews

[Elsie]

You don't have anything that could improve this at all. You have put in so much meaning in this that there is nothing that needs to go in. You have drawn the reader and and take them on a journey. A journey that they will never forget.

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you.

[Lizardo]

Improve? I love how it is because it speaks the cold hard truth about humans
Selfish acts all over the place.
I sincerly love this poem and this is going to my favorites.
What a great poem!

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you again.

[Lizardo]

You're welcome

[Mila]

Stunning work here, great job!

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you Mila

[Norah]

I absolutely loved this poem, very deep! Nice write!!

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you Norah

[R Smith]

you got it just right, all the wrongs in this world gathered together in your poem, well done

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you Richard

[Luna Zerimar]

You're are absolutely spot on.

Yes, there's room for a bit of improvement, but you shouldn't change it. Any of it.

This opens one's eyes. Exactly what people need.

A reality check. Well done!

[Bhumika Devkota]

Thank you Jessica