the last walk

The curtain falls......
and everything goes dark.
I take the make up off my face
and wait alone..
I gaze emptily
at the closed door...

Voices rise and fall
people come and go,
and I'm sitting still
gazing emptily,
at the closed door

I hear footsteps approaching
my heart beats as they come closer,
and the door slowly creaks
it's wide open

A figure standing behind
I see him hold out his hand
a kind smile revealed on his face

Unconsciously i take the hand

he helps me up
and we walk together
out of the open door

A stolen look I peak at the face,
'tis death and nothing more.

Released i walk more confident
and hand in hand we march
towards the end of all.

Author's Note

meh

Reviews

[Imagine Blade]

Gosh!

When I reached the end, my heart kind of experienced some kind of pain!
Wow! Amazing!

As I was reading this, I kind of imagined a girl trapped in a place where she can see and hear other people but she can't move herself. It's a sad situation to be put in. And then someone was kind enough to hold out their hand and helped her up.

And to my surprise, it was Death.

The twist was amazing (though sad) that it surprised me (A LOT).
Beautiful. Really beautiful.

[Salar Majak]

aww really? thanks so much

[Balkaran Sidhu]

oh the emptiness...and then finally marching hand in hand.... nice journey :)

[Dinali Sathma]

My heart flipped at the identification but then you marched hand in hand. Extraordinary imagery, idea and it was so captivating.
Is there any specific reason you do not capitalize " i " ?

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot, and no there isn't any reason XD, just ,y mistake :P

[Dinali Sathma]

okay thanks

[LA Lorena]

Vaguely reminiscent of Shakespeare in theme...he struts his hour upon the stage and then is heard no more. I thought this was rather good, and enjoyed it.

I'm left wondering about the failure of the author to capitalize the "i" throughout the poem. Is it deliberate, or just the style you use, or a subconscious habit of not seeing your own importance? Not that it matters to the story, but my OCD tendencies have been piqued now. LOL.
a few spelling errors..peak should be peek, releaved should be relieved. not sure if that matters to you or not, but when you write as promisingly as you do, it should. that's a compliment :)

[Salar Majak]

thanks alot! i think i know what you mean about Shakespeare, and ohabout the capitalizations, it's just a habbit XD, but i looove when you said: "subconscious habit of not seeing your own importance" i love it!
thanks alot for the corrections!, i need them badly :P. and thanks for reading i'm really glad youl ike it, this means alot :)

[Sid]

Nicely written, great ending...enjoyed it!!

[Salar Majak]

glad you liked it thanks

[dunnia]

wow this is really nice love the ending

[Salar Majak]

thanks

[Cara]

nice

[WingsToFly]

Nicely written.

[Salar Majak]

thanks

[quinfinn]

seems you had a date with destiny here and there was no shock or surprise, only passive resignation and blind acceptance. i like the feel of this and enjoyed the story within, it is a common theme in my writes, so i openly embrace the ideas. well done

[Salar Majak]

thank you :)