taking Death's side

taking Death's side

A Poem by Salar Majak
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this came out of no where

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A maze i'm trapped inside
my soul does thrive
a way out to find
away, from the hidden tears,
away, from the hidden cries.

"Sleep'' a whisper is heard
through out the blowing wind
i'm layed on the thorn like stones

''Sleep my child''
is repeated a million times
''all is gone now, no where left to hide,
for ever sleep, forever die''

Amidst the flames i lie
surrounded with stormy fire
between the red raging waves
consumed with anger of desire,
summoned by the darkest worlds,
to the battle feild of dreams,
 to fight for death over life.

© 2013 Salar Majak


Author's Note

Salar Majak
i don't know what this is, just call it a crazy thought, correcti0ons are welcomed, and yes i did type the ''i''s small on purpes.

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"forever sleep, forever die"
It is not often that we think of death to be eternal. I feel like most of the time it's painted as a door--you walk through it, perhaps to another life and perhaps to a sort of non-life yet non-death. These two lines, by far my favorite, lay bare the reality we so often like to forget: that death is forever.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Salar Majak

8 Years Ago

death is immortal, i don't know that,who does? thanks alot for your words
Siren

8 Years Ago

welcome (:
nice

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

to the battle 'field' of dreams,

fantastic...good expression here

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a beautifully poignant piece. Your imagery is great and it has a nice flow, especially the last stanza. Nice work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Salar Majak

8 Years Ago

thanks alot, i'm glad you like it
Lovely deep thought provoking write . Battle field of dreams poignant.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a wonderful write, Its deep and thought provoking, I have had these same thoughts countless times.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Salar Majak

8 Years Ago

Glad some one like me did :) thanks
Many times most amazing piece come our of crazy thoughts. You always draws us inside your world, your emotions. Nice write. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Salar Majak

8 Years Ago

thanks so much for your great words!
wow great work keep it all up

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Salar Majak

8 Years Ago

thanks :D
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DrD
Not a crazy thought at all. This is your reality right now and I appreciate what it leads you to write.

It's "laid" not "layed."

Very nice job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Salar Majak

8 Years Ago

thanks Dr.D i'mglad you like it
Wonderfully disturbing and beautifully haunting...

Very, very nice! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Salar Majak

8 Years Ago

thanks you very very much!
Felicity's Eve

8 Years Ago

:)

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