Still, the rain keeps on falling

I have made my peace and paid my debts

Still, the rain keeps on falling

I have buried pain and burned regrets

Still, the rain keeps on falling

They say the righteous path 

will lead you home again

But God ain't heard a word I've said,

and to me that ain't friend

'Cause the devil answers all my calls

and shows up now and then

So tell me man, why should I repent?

Why should I drop to bended knees?

'Cause kicking up dust don't seem so bad, 

when it just floats away in the breeze.

Because no matter what I do,

until I hear that final calling

The dirt always settles in the end, 

because the rain just keeps on falling

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

I like the repetition here, it works well. Your lines would pass for song lyrics. What do you have to do to feel some sunshine, that's what I am asking here. No matter what you do, it still feels like pouring rain. Pouring rain for me is sadness, but I guess if you lived in a desert it could be joyous. I enjoyed the read. Thank you.

Chris

[BBP]

Thank you Chris! I feel like I don;t really even know what poetry is and I jsut write very short song lyrics lol Thank you for the read and kind review. :)

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome and I enjoyed the read. I love music as well as poetry :)

[BBP]

Me too! So when I write I always have a musical beat in my head accompanying it!

[Chris Shaw]

I always listen for the beat :)

[BBP]

Me too! In everything.

[barleygirl]

To be honest, there's been quite a bit of dreary writing posted at the cafe lately, but to me this is different & more striking than the typical dreary message. This is a well crafted message. This could be the lyrics to a blues song, becuz of the way the narrator sounds a little snarly & sassy & irreverent. I'm not a fan of blaming God, but the way you worded that part of this message, it comes across as perfectly reasonable questioning of the man upstairs. I find rain to be joyous . . . am waiting for long-due rain right now . . . so I'll be singing your blues song in my mind as it comes down later on (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[BBP]

thank you Margie. I am not a fan of placing blame either but it just worked for the story. My writing are usually dark but I try to either humor em up or tell a cool old story with em. :)

Thanks for the read and the words. Always appreciated.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Poetry, deep and dark.
Not, at all, difficult to feel this way.
God is still the good guy--though, admittedly, quite often, the strong, silent type.
Devil, on the other hand, resembles a ghetto pawnbroker who routinely acquires souls with two-dollar offers.
Hard-hitting work!

[BBP]

A Ghetto Pawnbroker! Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant! love it Jimmy.

Thanks for the awesome review as always.

[Tate Morgan]

A great way to look at life. I dont worry about what is going to happen in the afterlife i am here to test myself in this life Bravo I Like it

[BBP]

Thanks Tate! It was just a fun take off the creedence song.

[Tate Morgan]

My son is 22 listens to my generations music lol well the 70s were probably the height of rock and roll

[BBP]

That they were. I was lucky enough to have parents who raised me on oldies and classic rock. Made me a much better person lol

[Tate Morgan]

It’s nice when he my son is home from school I hear the sounds of my youth rocking from his room lol it beats the hell outta boy bands

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! keeping it real eh!? there is a whole lot more to the story says i! ;) there is a piece missing i think ... it has to do with something i read in the Bible a long time ago .. "Romans 3:4King James Version (KJV) God forbid: yea, let God be true, but every man a liar; as it is written, That thou mightest be justified in thy sayings, and mightest overcome when thou art judged."
i my life i have used that bit of wisdom when i don't know, or understand or can't hear well .. an answer of silence ;)
its actually scary to me to give darkness the reins ...i think the truth of that entity responding very quickly is rock solid true ... but always a price to be paid eh!? great poem...opened up my thoughts for the morning and beyond :))) i think the rhyming and repetition are strong use of the tools .. read it once its so smooth i feel i prasped the whole thing clearly .. nice job! great theme .. scary devil ;O
E.

[BBP]

Thank you very much!

I read a quote that said...

If the devil keeps pushing you to look to the past, there must be somthing wonderful in your future he doesnt want you to see! :)

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha oh thats a good one ..thanks for sharing ... i will put that under the bonnet to keep for sure ..sound wisdom says i! :))

[Matthew Kult]

Distressingly Conscious

Great Read

Matthew

[BBP]

Thank you. One of my personal fav's...inspired by CCR if ya couldnt tell lol

[Matthew Kult]

I am old enough to know CCR. Your dating yourself. Hehe.

[BBP]

hahaha...noooooo im a young gun...just have an old soul for music lol

[Matthew Kult]

mhmm. i kid. Then you have good taste.

[BBP]

lol I'm teasing too lol not that young it I did grow up with parents who trained me in good music lol

[Alessander]

Love the refrain.

Makes it feel monotonous, relentless and inevitable.

And most think of rain as regeneration, but here it acts as an agent of uncaring nature where man and his suffering differs no more than a plant.

[BBP]

Sorry I missed this one Alessander. Always kind words

[Inda]

i really liked this! i'm not religious but i just liked the story here and i think most of us at some point or another have had a similar though. This is very engaging and honest and that is what writing is about. love it!

[BBP]

Thank you! I am not reliugious either, using the analogies just made for a better piece! lol

Thank you for understanding the overall concept of the piece. :)

[Paul Bell]

You are not praying to the right God.
You need to be praying to my outlaw sect.
Just send me the usual thousand dollars joining fee.
I will send you through the information needed.
The devil is in the detail.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, very strong pouring! We've all had that discussion with God or whoever it is up there... I really enjoy your strong uninhibited voice it's so refreshing. Izzy