Why Can't You See Me?

Boy believes he is invisible to the girl he loves.

I spent another day watching you when you were near,

and when you were away, I watched you in my mind

The sound of your voice is so lovely to hear

I've spent the another day watching you

But why can't you see me?

 

He talked to you today. He made you laugh and smile

You watched him with eager eyes, as I watch you

I would run through fire, for your heart only, for miles

I've spent another day watching you

But why can't you see me?

 

I wish to talk to you, to be friends with you atleast

But what do I say? What do I do? I am too weak.

My love for you shall never cease.

I've spent another day watching you

But why can't you see me?

 

I've thought and dreamt about this moment,

What I will finally say to you to begin what I hope will be a long relationship.

I will not back down. This is my time and I own it.

I've spent another day watching you

But why can't you see me?

 

....Who knows? Maybe I've been watched by you all along.

Author's Note

It is my first time writing a poem. It was mainly for practice, but let me know what you think anyways. Thanks.

Reviews

[Caitlynxoxo]

I think the reason I enjoyed this poem so much is because i have loved from afar as well. The words you speak hit home with such force. I can practically picture the events that occur, and feel the emotions running through the speaker's soul. You have a talent with writing, with telling a story through poetry. Keep up the amazing work :) Thanks for sharing

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[Red Brick Keshner]

To be seen and not heard is bad enough. To not be seen as well could be quite agonising. There must be some creative way to make her 'see' you, there is until June. Best wishes.

[ATaekwondo]

Nice Job and creativity! Keep writing and you will be successful one day! :)

[Miss Sally Sunshine]

Nice!!! I wouldn't have been able to tell this was your first time writing a poem if you hadn't said it! Great job!!

[misha]

Nice job on this piece! Sometimes we look over the people that we should have seen the whole time. Great job.

[Gone]

Nicely crafted and took me back to my youth. So many young ladies still unaware of the feelings I once held for them. They were too busy looking at the 'cool' guys! LOL!

[Peter Joseph Swanson]

Fabulous!