Why Can't You See Me?

Boy believes he is invisible to the girl he loves.

I spent another day watching you when you were near,

and when you were away, I watched you in my mind

The sound of your voice is so lovely to hear

I've spent the another day watching you

But why can't you see me?

 

He talked to you today. He made you laugh and smile

You watched him with eager eyes, as I watch you

I would run through fire, for your heart only, for miles

I've spent another day watching you

But why can't you see me?

 

I wish to talk to you, to be friends with you atleast

But what do I say? What do I do? I am too weak.

My love for you shall never cease.

I've spent another day watching you

But why can't you see me?

 

I've thought and dreamt about this moment,

What I will finally say to you to begin what I hope will be a long relationship.

I will not back down. This is my time and I own it.

I've spent another day watching you

But why can't you see me?

 

....Who knows? Maybe I've been watched by you all along.

Author's Note

It is my first time writing a poem. It was mainly for practice, but let me know what you think anyways. Thanks.

Reviews

[Caitlynxoxo]

I think the reason I enjoyed this poem so much is because i have loved from afar as well. The words you speak hit home with such force. I can practically picture the events that occur, and feel the emotions running through the speaker's soul. You have a talent with writing, with telling a story through poetry. Keep up the amazing work :) Thanks for sharing

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww. I really liked this. It's really good. You capture what it's like to fall in love with someone and wanting their attention...
Beautiful piece! I can relate because of the emotions this poem brings. Well done!

[Lilmissfit]

this is a really great poem what makes it 10times more awsome is that its your first poem, you've got alot of talent. this poem can easily be realated to and is worded awsomely :) love the ending! great write! :)

[dreaming dame]

:) Wonderful write, Especially for a first. :) It's soo sweet, and I have been in this situation myself.
Beautifu poem! :)

[raindroplove]

whats wierd is i wrote a poem almost like this well mine was about a guy but is very alike i like your beter

[Catherine]

This is really good. Its so honest which I think is important in any piece of writting, and you seem like quite the romantic lol. Keep it up! :)

[BloodyRabbit]

great poem! I could feel the emotion in it and relate to it :) good work, keep writing coz ur good at it :) thanks for sharing..

[GP]

As a guy who is going through this exact situation right now this was a poem I could easily relate to. You wrote it so well. I could feel the emotions and the longing for that girl. Great job for a first poem!

[Lover109]

I really like this poem. I can relate to it and its very well written. Very good poem

[Kate]

I really enjoyed this poem. If you change the pronouns, it applies to me too. Excellent job at capturing those feelings.