All to you

A relationship ended and one still loves the other.

 

I’d give it all to you

My heart and mind,

My body and soul.

I’d give it all to you.

Just to hear your sweet cry

When you call my name.

I’d give it all to you.

Just to be in your arms

Feeling your warmth one last time.

I’d give it all to you.

Just to know what you were thinking

Every time you say hi.

I’d give it all to you.

Just to let you know I love you

Without a scarlet flush.

I’d give it all to you.

Just so you would take me back

To the sweet, sweet memory we used to be.

Author's Note

I was competing with one of my friends to see who could write a poem faster, i won so its still quite rough, sorry.

Reviews

[Dennis Shanaberg]

It's a fairly simple poem. But it states quite clearly your emotion, and does it well, with some well placed linguistics.
It's not a particularly unique piece. Other than I did really like the line:

Every time you say hi

It was an interesting addition to the work. That did begin to set it apart. I think maybe it could do with a little more working up...like you said, it's still a little rough. But this is a great start.

[deeps]

I really like this, It's wonderful and read lovely!
Very well expressed and written.