The Silent One

I haven't written a poem in a while and i wanted to see if i could still do it :)

I was there…

When the first star

Pierced the sky

I was there...

When man saw

His first light

I was there...

As kingdom rose

Fell

And rose again

I was there...

Watching…

In perfect silence

I was there…

When wars raged

When death took men

And women

And babes

I was there…

When brief peace

Visited the land

Setting hearts at ease

I was there...

Watching…

In perfect silence

I was there…

When man was born

I’ll still be here…

When man has died

And when all has passed

Due to my cruel touch

I’ll still be here…

Watching…

In perfect silence

Author's Note

I probably will go back and edit later but still criticism is both encouraged and requested :)

Reviews

[Sapientiam]

Ah, I love poems that speak as dialogue and tell a story! This felt like something from a videogame or a prologue to a book. I can't even describe how beautiful this is! You're such an amazing writer! ^ ^

[Sira YR]

Thank you soo much sapientiam!! You are right, it does feel like something from a game or a prologue. Your review is very much appreciated :)

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This could be the spoken intro to a science fiction or fantasy movie... When I read this I had this whisper-like women's voice in my head.
I really love this poem; It's mysterious, it makes you want to believe it. The lay out is just the perfect finishing touch, so well done :)

[Sira YR]

Thank you so much for your review :). That's what I thought about it as well :)

[Makrix Mottle]

Quite good! I liked it very much!

[Sira YR]

Thank you very much for your review :). It means so much to me!