Fever

Just words

                       

             Fever

I told her." Love don't die sweetie. Love is like the German wines, become more sweeter and tastier with time." Tonight you are wearing your red dress and dangerous smile. I felt the burning to steal you away and make you my love tonight.

Taunting words requested dancing and some wine tonight.  Your beautiful eyes making promises of perfect night and wild evening. I fall into wild brown eyes and the fever overtake me I want to feel the warmth of your lips upon my lips and the closeness of your body as we danced deep into the torment of the long night.

I felt the inferno stirring up the fever of love.  Making Your body become part of my body as the music steal us to perfect place and the utopia where lovers must reach.

You whispered. "I love you, I love you, I love you. Love goes on and on till the interlude is broken by lover swords." I brought my lover closer and I whispered.  "This is called love, my lover. Lover dance and sing till the end. The Gods will win. Death will separate us one day but tonight you are my love, my only love. My only sweet wish I know."

                                John Castellenas/Coyote

Author's Note

Just words.

Reviews

[r. f. jordan]

..."as we danced deep into the torment of the long night." Dearest Coyote, it has been a long while since last we communicated. my fault. i had to go attend to some things for awhile, but i was extremely pleased, upon coming back, to see that you are still active on this site. from what i recall, there was always a positive message to your work, and an unyielding encouragement to your reviews. without any offense to that good work you were posting in my past experience on here, you appear to me as if you have beautifully evolved as a writer in the close to a year i have been away. this piece does, in my opinion, a phenomenal job of expressing the fragility within that simultaneous hope and mortality that love can illicit. fantastic work, good man. please don't ever stop contributing your wisdom and talent to this site.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend. I appreciate the kind and positive words. I'm glad to see your name appear upon my page.

[MiracleMagazine]

You have a way with words, this is really nicely penned down.

I'm from Miracle Magazine and we are open for submissions for our second issue right now. You write really well, do send around your work. Here is our website's link:

http://miraclemagazineind.wix.com/miracleindia

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for the invite. I will check-out tomorrow night.

[Troy Henson]

Loves prison is that sometimes we feel like thats all that matters. This is quite the alluring piece. Very well don

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Troy . I appreciate the kind words.

[Ruth]

Brings to mind the notion of living in the moment and nothing else matters as is beyond our control...only that burn can lure a heart so fiercely, superb hon :)

[Coyote Poetry]

The singer is amazing. Good song make good poetry. Thank you dear friend for reading and the comment.

[A hare off]

This is simply fantastic. You know how to to capture love and express it wonderfully from your pen. Very well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[DeerInHeadlights]

very interesting for just words. you have a way of putting things in a different perspective. interesting how one may view the happenings you have stated in these words- vs what her point of view would be. that is what makes writing so interesting. it is from an individual perspective.

thoughtful..

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you my friend for reading and the comment. I do appreciate.

[Davidgeo]

"Tonight you are wearing your red dress and dangerous smile" bwaahaha... are you a 12 yer old girl?

"Taunting words requested dancing and some wine tonight." again, that smells more like a pre teen love poem. How about "Taunting requests of night dancing and wine drinking" I mean, really any other phrasing would be better than that collection of stupid you have up there.

..... Love goes on and on till the interlude is broken by lover swords." What does that mean? Like two gay dudes playing light sabers with their boners or, what? Lover swords? Jesus H christ... how was this on the popular writing section? Is this site for 15 year old girls or younger only?

[Coyote Poetry]

Just words. Don't like them. Don't read them. That is the option of the reader. If I don't like something. Just move on and read something else. Thank you for stopping by.

[Davidgeo]

So your poem sucked to me? Big deal. Don't go on the tired "don't like it don't read it" argument... how about, don't like criticism don't allow reviews? Glad handing is for p*****s and children.... which one are you?

[RibhyMay]

I'm awfully sorry to intrude, but if you didn't like this writing, then I would strongly suggest that you take yourself elsewhere, because horrid comments like this are not welcome here. This is an incredibly talented writer expressing what goes on in their brilliant mind in the best way that they can, and shredding them to pieces makes you an incredibly horrible person. I personally thought that this was an exceptional piece of writing, and think that the writer should be extremely proud of themselves. Good day.

[Davidgeo]

Honest critique does not make me a horrible person. If you can't handle it, don't allow reviews or whatever it is you do here to preclude that. I mean, rename "review" to "unqualified praise hand job" if that's all you kids are looking for. And for real, go intrude elsewhere with that kindergarten teacher BS, it's not required here.

[RibhyMay]

Please, don't think that I am saying that I can't take a hit. All I am saying is that there is a certain way to go about it, and not everybody responds to the blunt approach well. I see your point, but as you can see, I am choosing to ignore it.

[Davidgeo]

Why are you still talking to me about this? You understand how I feel... you SHOULD understand that I don't really care how you feel... done... right? right.

[r. f. jordan]

i came across HansJizzy's review of Coyote's piece today. as scathing as it was i thought i'd take a look at whatever writing they were posting. it appears as if they are already off of this site...

[Davidgeo]

Oh god damn.... so I'm honest. Rationally tell me why I have nothing to say? My purpose here to day is not to dictate what you say....

[Davidgeo]

Don't be afraid of me... I am everything you lack
I am the part of you
you .....

[Lydia Shutter]

The passion, the urgency, the seduction...WOW! Fantastic, John. Lydi**

[Coyote Poetry]

The good song gave me positive motivation. Thank you Lydia for reading and the comment.

[boblakin]

Loves a thing isn't it. Hard to see, harder to find, but more strength than steel.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree and thank you for reading and the comment.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear John, sweeter and tastier with time...
to appreciate kisses sweeter than wine is an
art in itself. Exquisite poetry. truly, Pat

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Patricia. I appreciate the kind words.

[Patricia Wedel]

You are welcome... Pat