Kneeling Down in Time

Kneeling Down in Time

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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When circumstances question the proudest man's sight...............

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Knelt down in time, who can say, that life is not forever glowing 
Without doing a full circle inside spaces in their mind
When circumstances do question the proudest man’s sight
On amazing nights, when the full moon is his to find

Can the bottom of your heart get tangled up in winds that stay
Then step inward to wonder why the sky’s not blue
As those thoughts and desires from that one minute past
Softly trickle drop by drop and hold on tight to you

Is this the way it’s always been, just how the deep sea roars
When unexpected words leave nothing but replies
That softly caresses everything you cannot  look upon
Even though you hear it whisper in another’s eyes

Are they never to be thought of, or even touched by our hearts
Without doing full circles inside spaces in our minds
When circumstances question the proudest man’s sight
Will he come untangled, kneeling down in time

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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Neva,
I always love the way you tie things up so neatly and precise...you have such an art of doing that...repeating just enough to remind us where we've been in your heart and your mind...it's refreshing and beautifully done....all the time...
Another great write....
allen

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if i will kneel to nothing but GOD and one other...am i to proud?

Posted 12 Years Ago


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You definitely have a way with panting images here and I think its fantastic. I also like the philosophical nature of this piece, very profound. Great work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Very beautiful and peaceful. "Even though you hear it whisper in another’s eyes" love this line. Got the juices flowing XD


Posted 12 Years Ago


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Neva your writing continually impresses me and I am always amazed by what I read. Your work is exceptional and I've loved every one of them that I have read. This one included!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem comforts me...wonderfully inked my friend :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Profoundly beautiful! Wrapped up neatly at the ending, and kept me glued all the way through~

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Mmmmm bit undecided about this one... not sure why, might be the last I read of yours was outstanding. sensational and other kewl describing words, I may come back to this later......

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Some deeply philosophical thinking to challenge the mind and soul,,, worthy of many reads to find many meanings.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Clinging memories and serendipity, blended with personalities that might or might not understand the significance of a returned moment, or of a reply to a heartfelt question. Interrelationships are oftentimes tested by how deeply one feels about the past and hopes for the future.

Nice poem...well done. Unique and thought provoking.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Love the fluidity in the piece, delicately emotive.

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Added on June 16, 2011
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Tags: time, life, heart, desires, man, pride

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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