Kneeling Down in Time

Kneeling Down in Time

A Poem by Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
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When circumstances question the proudest man's sight...............

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Knelt down in time, who can say, that life is not forever glowing 
Without doing a full circle inside spaces in their mind
When circumstances do question the proudest man’s sight
On amazing nights, when the full moon is his to find

Can the bottom of your heart get tangled up in winds that stay
Then step inward to wonder why the sky’s not blue
As those thoughts and desires from that one minute past
Softly trickle drop by drop and hold on tight to you

Is this the way it’s always been, just how the deep sea roars
When unexpected words leave nothing but replies
That softly caresses everything you cannot  look upon
Even though you hear it whisper in another’s eyes

Are they never to be thought of, or even touched by our hearts
Without doing full circles inside spaces in our minds
When circumstances question the proudest man’s sight
Will he come untangled, kneeling down in time

© 2011 Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm


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Neva,
I always love the way you tie things up so neatly and precise...you have such an art of doing that...repeating just enough to remind us where we've been in your heart and your mind...it's refreshing and beautifully done....all the time...
Another great write....
allen

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Lush and layered. You are an amazingly thoughtful writer.

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Neva... I LOVED the way I did a double take on this piece.It forced me to have to reread again, because I felt like in trying to analyze it, I may have lost the deeper meaning inside it.The proudest of men see their pride as strength, we know it to be their greatest weakness. I first familiarized myself with you by perusing your comments to others. I was struck by the beauty of your perception. I am even more dazzled, now.

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Had to come back to this after WC took forever in loosing my review earlier. This is perfect. Again. The imagry and flow, the feel of the words as you read out loud, The beautiful feeling of it. And the newness.
Perfect.

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love the fluidity of thought and mind here - the way it flows - the rhyme - you have such a defined voice in your pieces - refined too - you know your poetry and it comes through all the time - another great write from your pen! bravo!

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Magnificent :)

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philosophical, insightful, and penned so well...

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another beautiful and powerful piece.. great write neva!

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This is such an intriguing and provocative poem...I find it so weaved in wisdom and man is so tangled right now...full of imagery

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I am amazed...every time I read your piece, I feel a certain bit of me is replenished...I love the imagery and the lovely subtlety in your pieces.

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hmmm ...several mentions of Kneeling and knees in your latest pieces..any story there?

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Added on June 16, 2011
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Tags: time, life, heart, desires, man, pride

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Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm
Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm

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Hello, I am Neva, 4i, from Atlanta, Georgia. My latest book and videos: My latest book - Mailing Letters to the Moon rm_f1st('6','182','true','false','000000','av2j3.. more..

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