Fine Glass

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                                   The misty morning  

                             Like a circus balloon lost from our grasp.

                      Ascending in a fall, up and up it goes.

              With the warmth from the sun carried on the breeze.

                                        Fog now full canopies the trees.

                              As a color not named blazes through.

                         and the climbing sun deepens in hues.

           The paling sun dimly smiles, as tendrils of mist are on the rise,

                                                      covers the ground in a pooling nest.

                  That misty breath released from rest,

            Awakes the effervescence of dawn.  

       from morning’s blanket of brown.

  Bubbling up,

 

    

Reviews

[barleygirl]

You get the prize for being the most inventive at the cafe in 2020! This is all that you intend for it to be & more. Many play with typesetting but I've never seen it done this effectively, to illustrate what's being conveyed by the words. I was so enthralled by your inventiveness, I couldn't hardly concentrate on reading, I was FEELING the effervescence of what you'd created! I was just bubbling away the first time thru & had to reread to catch the deep substance there too! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Cherrie Palmer]

Emma and I was talking about this earlier this morning. I've tried this before and think it looks good on paper, but worry it looses the effect on a phone or labtop . I'm glad to hear it works :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i agree Barley Girl!

[Robert Trakofler]

I always wanted to fall up what a fun sensation:) on the few occasions that I have witnessed the morning dew rise to the new day it does feel like falling up! How clever this write is and it is framed in such a fitting way and I love the glass reference it is perfect! your poem works so well because of the title before the read it puts the question mark before the answer as you float up the lines

[Cherrie Palmer]

I have written a few poems like this one and was afraid it would not work on a phone(the format and all)but I wanted to give it a try.

[Wild Rose]

Clever and inventive >

The words lifting; as the mist from a lake
Rising up the side of the valley
Up and up to the sky >>> melting away as they go

[Cherrie Palmer]

Good morning Rose, thank you so much I'm delighted you liked this. :) I hope you are having and will have a blessed day.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I love this
I wish I was as talented xx

[Cherrie Palmer]

You rock, and I think that is what makes writing and reading in the cafe so delightful the endless ideas that fill the air and feed our imagination.

[T.S. Ulmus]

I'm blown away, what an innovative write. To see someone playing with words in a way I'd never thought is impressive. Leaving off the last two letters is my favorite part. You are truly an artist.

[Cherrie Palmer]

You can almost read it either direction. It's not as smooth as you tead it descending but close. I going to try another poem that sounds as good from either direction. We'll see how that turns out. :) and thank you for the generous review. I'm no Frost, but I do love to write. A compulsion that I yield to.

[Pete]

someone sure is cleverly carbonated today. fine crystal words with just the write amount of bubbling lift ... :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

:), thank you I may play with the layout a bit more. But all in all I am happy with this one. I'm glad you liked too.

[mariposa]

This is so creative! I am very fond of your work

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you so much, for your encouragement. I may add to the layout a little more. I look forward to returning the visit.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The description of the fall morning is sublime and feels touchable as you cause the reader to watch the words rise as the mist might indeed do.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Thank you John, I am delighted to know this conveyed my mental image.

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! so very creative Cherrie! just as the mist and fog rises so my eye in reading .. i almost felt i was floating as i got to the last few lines ... they pale grey font .. the glass fading and ascending .. great stuff says i! the analogy with glass is such a contrast ... but works wonderfully in my opinion .. i have watch glass being blown and the delicacy of it is sublime .. we do have a lot of fog in the hollers around here don't we?! well done ... so glad not to have missed this heavenly dawning :)
E.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I'm in Boxley Valley, right now elk watching

[Einstein Noodle]

how wonderful ... i am amazed we have Elk here in the Ozarks ... for some reason they seem misplaced to me ... hope you enjoyed the time .. they are magnificent freight trains aren't they ;)

[Cherrie Palmer]

It was a wonderful trip, seeing and hearing the elk was spectacular

[emmajoy]

Sitting here in awe, struck silent - which, as you know is a miracle in itself! Have read the once and peered. Now need to look carefully, study.. ..

Amazing! Not only have you created the poem but taken it into another dimension: ' Ascending in a fall, up and up it goes.. ' and so it does. Incredible! Impressive.

Are you willing to tell how long it took to work the words into that fall-rise? Please ignore request if you prefer, Cherrie. x

[Cherrie Palmer]

well I made a audio on the way to work, and knew I wanted glass to drift upward. I had trouble copying it because I put a tab in it. So I deleted what I had, made it online and then hit tab for each brake ( to hold the spacing) then staggered. I was fast and easy all in all cause I could see it in my head.

[emmajoy]

Am even more impressed now.. clever girl!