Hollow

Hollow

A Poem by Sangeetha
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It's about how I felt lonely all my life even in school and also because I'm an only child. It's focus is on how I felt like my place was among others.

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HOLLOW By Sangeetha

Open your kitchen cabinet
What do you see?
I see a jar as empty as can be

Open the door to your attic
What do you see?
I see an empty old box
Worn like the old oak tree

Go to your vanity
What do you see?
I see a girl empty like a forgotten dream.

Patient, tolerant and scared was thee
A girl who thought she was a warrior to be.
But what good is a sword if all you use is your shield
When hearts of lions you could not yield.

Look at the vanity again
Now, what do you see?
I see a girl as hollow as can be
Like a jar or a box I hold all that you see.

I listen and I see
All your stories and secrets lay deep within me.
Like an observer looking from the outside in
I must always Watch although it hurts within.

An unbreakable jar I must be to contain your pain
A dusty old box I must be forgotten in vain
All I am is a kneedle in a hay stack

Could be found... But never am.
Show me the thread, I must patch up
Before my heart bursts at the seams
Looks like I'm always there for you...
But there's no one left for me.

Now I'm older and your pain still lies safe with me.
Piled upon others that have entrusted theirs to me.
Where is my pain? Well I cannot say
I locked it up to make way.

People come and people go
But people never stay for me though
I am all that I have.

Open the doors to your soul
Are you just as hollow?

© 2016 Sangeetha


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as Helen said this piece has the ability to drag the reader in... there is a nice mixture of lively thoughts and painful memory...you played very well with words, its simplicity make the reader feel what the speaker or poet feels.... you got talent and i do believe you will work on more.... full ratings!!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sangeetha

4 Years Ago

thank you very much many people do say the same thing. one day i hope i can become i really good art.. read more
Inject Positivity

4 Years Ago

keep pursuing your dream and keep your willpower strong.... as Abraham Lincoln once said if you want.. read more
Sangeetha

4 Years Ago

ya i will Mr IP im hoping after my design school course ill have another go at it



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V
I really like the images, metaphorical ones to emphasise the feeling of being empty inside. I think this is an emotional state of one's mind many people can relate to. Well done imagery though the flow seems to be kind of slightly disturbed throughout (in some lines), it's nonetheless a well thought over poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Sangeetha

4 Years Ago

Ya I do agree it is a little off although many of my friends say it's good ...oh well different peop.. read more
V

4 Years Ago

Yes maybe. I don't like to argue about this. Poetry should be and feel flowing and undisturbed for m.. read more
Wow this is so deep. The imagery and descriptions are very vivid.

''I listen and I see
All your stories and secrets lay deep within me.
Like an observer looking from the outside in
I must always Watch although it hurts within.'' - excellent.

Well expressed!


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sangeetha

4 Years Ago

Thank you again for your review ms Jess and telling me which part you like best...I hope all my next.. read more
sangeetha,
It is the emptiness where the recreation begins. The writers could only find its tip and by experience they know it is a beginning. This is a stage where others( I mean those who are not writers in the full sense) can not enter by virtue of lackness. There is dispute , of course who are and who are not genuine writers. For argument sake it is admitted that every one can become a writer once he/she opens her inner diaspora....... will you call it SOUL? Even then there seems a touch which is inevitable for a fullfledged writing flow. When I reach at your question , it seems that you have already crossed smoothly the mark.
Remembering the psyche and its bonafide reflection are the very syptoms. Excellent
Carry on..............

M P Ramesh

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sangeetha

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much for that Mr ramesh your words of encouragement will not go unnoticed by this teena.. read more
as Helen said this piece has the ability to drag the reader in... there is a nice mixture of lively thoughts and painful memory...you played very well with words, its simplicity make the reader feel what the speaker or poet feels.... you got talent and i do believe you will work on more.... full ratings!!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sangeetha

4 Years Ago

thank you very much many people do say the same thing. one day i hope i can become i really good art.. read more
Inject Positivity

4 Years Ago

keep pursuing your dream and keep your willpower strong.... as Abraham Lincoln once said if you want.. read more
Sangeetha

4 Years Ago

ya i will Mr IP im hoping after my design school course ill have another go at it
aww, this is sad but wrote in a lovely way. the flow is good and draws the reader in, hoping for a happy ending.well done, full marks

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

4 Years Ago

hi both, sorry for not responding i hadnt seen it, IP is correct, shes 13 today..going on 21...and y.. read more
Inject Positivity

4 Years Ago

i thought you were asking me if we were frnds or not... lol...
Sangeetha

4 Years Ago

Whaaat noo of course were frnds and thanks for that ms Helen I glad that you think that I'm a good w.. read more

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