Creatures of the Night

Time to get into the Halloween spirit ;)

A fog that lingers ‘neath the full moon’s glow,

Across the baron fields of country side

An isolated mist of mystery’s woe;

The Horseman lingers, watching as he rides.

Beneath the full moon’s glow, the wolf, he howls;

At midnight gloom, he stalks, his bones decay;

The midnight creatures watch upon the prowl

To greet and strike whomever comes their way.

Beware the veil of night, a dark charade;

Oh mist of doom, conceal those all from sight!

Beware my friends, the eyes of red and jade -

The darkest hour beckons Evil’s blight.

Beware to all, the creatures cast from hell,

The stories past from one to next we tell.

Author's Note

Feel free to comment or provide constructive feedback! some of the syllables are shortened/altered to fit the rhyme :)
For those who are unsure: The Horseman refers to the headless horseman and the legend of Sleepy Hollow; "he stalks, his bones decay" refers to a zombie and/or skeleton (walking dead); and wolf is referring to a werewolf. Just to clarify :) The vague descriptions are meant to help let the mind ponder all that could be found in a dark, mist fallen field at night ;)

Reviews

[Chase]

I'm in love with your writing style. I may have to take a peek at your book. I tend to be a little vague in my writing as well... things of an ambiguous nature force us to draw our own conclusions!! Life would be dull indeed if all was handed to us on an azure platter. I think I may have to try my hand at sonnet poetry if I am going to feel this way when reading it! Lovely, lovely piece. Very fitting of our current month...

[Mazie]

Awwe!! c: well thank you again! I'm really glad you're enjoying it. I guess I favour a bit of the old-style writing (with some writing pieces). I like leaving things to the imagination in my poetry; it just allows the reader's mind to ponder I think. Shakespearean Sonnets are my absolute favourite! I just find them almost musical if you can get your words to match the rhythm and the flow of the sonnet. They're definitely fun to write! :)

[Chase]

You do favor the older styles. I don't generally care for much Shakespearean poetry.. but i chalk that up to his subject choices as opposed to the poems themselves. Your work takes a bit more time to dissect and appreciate so when i have more time i will be looking at more of your work. It deserves proper reviewing :)

[RAOrourke]

Very nice...loved the flow and pace of this piece as well as the haunting images it brought to mind!!

[J Johnson III]

J'aime cet poeme beaucoup. It is really good, love the descriptions. Aussi, l'halloween est mon fete favori!

[Mazie]

merci mon ami :)

[armin]

a nice and scary halloween tale and good you specified about your horse man in authors note to make it more clear. The last four lines were really nice punches to the write. I enjoyed it.
Have a nice time writing.

[Mazie]

thanks very much :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Being from India i wish halloween could be celebrated here too. I like this intriguing tales of dark. Its a fun to read too. It is creepy yet not that heavy as usual.dark poems are. Thats hell of a quality you have. I have been late in my reviews of.coming to you.but i guess better late then never. :) love and wishes

~Sophy

[Mazie]

Thank you so much Sophie :) and it's ok, I am on and off myself because of university lol. I appreciate the feedback :)
and you should come visit us in Canada :P it's one of my favourite days of the year :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Love halloween tales! Very eery, but light hearted web you have spun here. Flows with sweet perfection and the emphasis on the words adds character and personality. well penned.

[Mazie]

thanks so much :)

[Angad Waraich]

Well i am from India so Halloween isn't celebrated here.
But all in all this is wonderful writing, a nice piece with a great flow.
Enjoyed it.

Well done.

Thank you for sharing.
-Angad

[Mazie]

Thank you so much for reading and for your feedback :)
It's really one of my favourite days, it is fun to partake in Halloween activities that are a little less sinister like pumpkin carving haha :p But it's true not everyone celebrates it and not everyone likes it. I appreciate you taking the time to read though ^^

[Angad Waraich]

The reason we don't celebrate it is just because its not a festival here.
But my family abroad does celebrate and they have good stories to tell.
And yes reading it was my pleasure. :)

[Mazie]

ah ok! makes sense :)

[George Peck]

I love it. I think you did a great job.

[Mazie]

thanks George :)

[MomzillaNC]

So many amorphous things that give name and shape to our deepest fears in one poem. Great lines: "Beware, my friends, the creatures cast from hell, The stories past from one to next we tell."

NOTES: I think you mean the Headless Horseman, but without the article, it's questionable. Maybe something like the following would make the identity clearer: "As [the] Horseman lingers, [watching…] he rides."

[Mazie]

thank you so much ^^ and yes, I agree, I changed it to The Horseman to make the title more specific :) thank you for your feedback ^^

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. I'm glad I could help.

[Sami Khalil]

"Beware the veil of night, a dark charade;
Oh mist of doom, conceal those all from sight!
Beware my friends, the eyes of red and jade -
The darkest hour beckons Evil’s blight."

A very powerful and rhyming Halloween poem. Bravo...........

[Mazie]

thank you very much Sami ^.^

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......