Dancing In The Moonlight

Everybody's dancing in the moonlight...

They took the long way home

On the night of their anniversary

To stop and smell the roses

In the middle of Central Park,

He takes her hand

And leads her into a dance

That's warm and full of love 

They don't need music

To dance in the moonlight

Because they stir music and desire

In each other 

As they sway to the beat within,

They look up in the sky to see

An orbit of memories 

Encircling them as they dance

The moon shines bright

As they look into each other's eyes

She smiles at him and says 

"I love you,"

He smiles with pride

And continues to dance

Because he had a surprise for her;

He reaches into his pocket

And pulls out a box, 

Could it be what she thinks it is?

He kneels down before her and asks

"Will you marry me?"

She says yes,

And they hugged,

And kissed

While dancing the night away in the moonlight

Author's Note

First attempt at creating a story within a poem. Please be nice.

Reviews

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Story created- a love story. At first I thought those two were an old married couple, still in love, but when I read the marriage proposal part I could envision their love lasting that long. All the details come alive, and really paint a picture. This poem touches the heart.

[Gilbert Saint]

Great, but it would be greater if you do the story separately, then at the appropriate time, introduce the rhymes. It was great though.

[Chelsea.]

It was really cute :) I love this, great write.

wow...it's really beautiful..both the poem and the story within... Great work.

[Krystal Nicole]

I liked it. . It was really beautiful and romantic. Dont doubt your skills

[nothingnothingforgetfor..]

Such a romantic setting in the presence of a beautiful late night moon. Such a picture painted in my mind, drawn from the heart ripples of love emanating throughout the image. Wonderful!

[An Ordinary Woman]

It's lovely- sweet, tender. You related the story within a poem very nicely!

[Dragon]

I love this love poem. If only most love lives were like this, things would've been easier. You put a lot of details into this and emotion which really brings out the true colors. Great work. :)

[Wolf's Ink]

Like Droog, I thought it was also a story of an old couple, but the ending fits nicely as well. Wonderful job :)

[Buddhistboy73]

Wow! This poem reads beautifully....it draws you in and is just like a story to me. You capture the emotions well here:
"As they sway to the beat within,
They look up in the sky to see
An orbit of memories
Encircling them as they dance"

Great, enchanting write...thanks for sharing. You have real talent here.....:)

[Hunter C. Brown]

beautiful work, great descriptions and very interesting. Keep on writing