Everything Doesn't Always Work According To Your Schedule

The title says it all.

Everything doesn't always work

According to your schedule,

You see I have things  to do

And they don't involve 

Talking to you..

I have my own agenda

My own meetings to attend,

None that involve ever

Seeing you again

Because you said what

You had to say

And I listened,

But now its my turn

To talk...

I'm done with you,

You can find someone else

That will wait on you 

Hand and foot,

You see...

I have my own schedule 

And you're not included

Reviews

[Chris]

Ta'Sha,

Comment: Problem is BOTH end in the same place - an empty circular-file with endless echoes of self...takes multiple I's to make a We... but no We survives a being thats only I.

Review: Read aloud - the 'Dance' stumbles and the anger that gives it the BITE and honesty fades. The content is valid. The emotion is present... and people WILL hear the thoughts you express...

Take care,
Chris

[brenda]

nice
!
:)

[Call Me Blu]

Good base idea and story but bad flowyness. I have this problem as well but I am terrible about editing.

[Gilbert Saint]

Ta'Shandra this was poorly done even for a poet your level. No expression, nothing, the poem didn't flow for me, surely, its like you were so pissed to even bother to think of your readers' opinion of the poem, express the normal in an extraordinary way.

[nevermindfan1991]

An amazing poem, I've realized I do this myself. Great job!

[FallenWingz]

Oh this is so true...some ppl think you sud just put down what you busy with and do as they say....which is time for ppl to stop letting others push them over..

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice tell off.

[J Todd Underhill]

Caughlin's law: "everything ends badly otherwise it wouldn't end it would just continue on and on." (Cocktail) this was well written indeed!

[EverEmma]

A good poem that honestly says what we all need to say to that one person. I think it has a good message but trips a little bit when we get to flow and reading it aloud.
Still a very good poem that could be made even better with shorter more direct lines.

[donny ingraham]

I like the way it depicted work and a schedule

[Uc Amalu Jr]

It depicts rejection and a certain level of anger at the victim whom you definitely do not want to see again. Good work