I Think You're The One

A good note turned sour.

I think you're the one for me

Because you're unlike all the others,

You treat me like a star

I'm getting the royal treatment,

I think you're the one for me 

Because you make me feel special,

You make me feel beautiful

And worth something

You are the one for me

Because of your boyish charm

And adorable smile,

You had me wrapped around your finger!

I thought you were the one for me

But you led a double life,

You made me believe that who you said you were

As the real you.. But it wasn't,

You're just a crook in disguise

Trying to steal someone else's joy

I thought you were the one for me

But you turned out to be

Just like all the others 

Reviews

[Brad Nugent]

Unfortunately it does take time until we find the right relationship - that perfect fit. Some start well in our own minds, but end badly as you describe. Some never get off the ground because they are clearly not right! I hate admitting that I am a romantic optimist at heart - but I do believe that happiness and love are out there - sometimes in the least expected places. A nice write about love and the betrayal of love that hurts so much when it hits us. Well done.

[Hello, Goodbye]

excellent candid expression of the heart

[amdc101]

Nice write. This is one of my favorites by you.

[TJ]

What a saddening twist this piece took. What's even more sad is that this is usually how it happens; people are deceived into thinking they've found what they were looking for but the deception will inevitably be revealed... Usually to the heartbreak of the deceived.
Very good. A lot more emotion is packed in here than what initially meets the eye.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

The pain of finding out that a man can turn out to be a d****e is 50/100. It would be a miracle to find a decent guy these days that don't appreciate anything. This poem was reflective really but you can really see the damage it cause to both people ending in dire consequences. Scary but we must hope one day the judgment will fall upon them and then they will be the one wrapped around our fingers like a useless puppet.

[tyLLanI]

i liked the contrasting voices. its unexpected.

[AngelAfterlife]

great write hunni!!!!

[Jazique]

Well done in writing this poem for I never saw the twist coming but, then again neither dose anybody in real life in this situation. It truly is sad that their are so many people who pose as the one in your life but, at the end of some of them its just another game that leaves you with a broken heart and you described so well in a certain way. Excellent job on writing the one but, at the end he was just a fake just as the love. So sad but, keep up the excellent writings.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Love the contrast, flows so well indeed :)

[Thea]

I really like the ending...I know how it feels...Nice poem! I can relate to it...Well done... :)))

[Becky C Strukamp]

You have penned well the emotions and struggle of a want that is not full filled. Excellent write.