Evicted

 

 

Love needy...

 

Exploring

Pouring

Out of my soul

Love

All of me

You can have it

Here, hold my world 

I'm only asking 

For true love in return

 

He studied me like a textbook...

 

Seeking love

Finding deception 

Motives

Not governed by love

Steal my kindness

Weakness

Is what you read on its label

A dime a dozen

Is what you paid

 

What he got...

 

Grab my heart

Squeeze it

Until it bleeds

Don’t waste a drop

A never ending supply

Of my painfilled

Bloody tears

Is what you got

To wet your egotistical whistle with

 

Worth the cost ...

 

And it only cost you..

Nothing

You took the

Five finger discount

And I

Like the fool my Father

Didn't raise

Unknowingly relinquished

My unguarded soul

 

Ah, but wait!

The fountain…

That beautiful flowing

Healing fountain!

I must find it

I must …

For if I don’t

I will bleed to death

Internally

Eternally

And the "I" that I am meant to be

Shall perish

Prematurely 

 

…..and I’m not done here yet.

 

I call out to the fountain,

My lovely healing fountain

Oh no…

My voice!!

Where is my voice?!

Can you hear me?!

I scream in silence

 

For years.

 

Head down,

Walking through life 

One day

I stumbled upon a 

Fountain

A beautiful

Clear, pure

Flowing, healing

Fountain

 

And it spoke to me… 

 

“Drink of me,

Or you shall suffer

A spiritual death.  

Your insatiable need to love

And to be loved …

Will be no longer.

Your purpose will be taken

It will spill from you

Causing a flood

And the one who truly needed you

Who is waiting to love you

Will drown.

 

So I drank…

 

The sweetest water I have ever tasted

A cool, clear, loving liquid

Glided down my throat

Into my bosom

My womb

My heart 

Peace,

Strength

LOVE

Not external

Internal…

 

Clarity...

 

Perception

Changed its direction

And found the place

Where true love is conceived

Within

Where it has always been

Waiting  

And now resides  

Eternally

The previous tenant

Was a liar

 

And was evicted.

 

Reviews

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

will bleed to death
Internally
Eternally
And the "I" I am meant to be
Shall perish
Prematurely

Loved the whole poem but the above lines were just exceptional. I think you have reached a new high. The energy in the piece is refreshing. And finding love within, priceless. Good job Dani.

Kim

[~*666 Draven Von Tepes ..]

nice:)

[Ralphy]

Wow, that was beautiful and the conclusion was stunning...absolutely...

[Jenny Davis]

W w w ow w W! What an amazingly bright, introspective piece...this is amazing, Dani. I can't say enough...
Awesome work :)

[Rylan Batten]

really great build up, really great conclusion...your word choice and symbolism tie together extremely well. Very good job, keep it up

[Jason]

DC,

thanks for posting! I enjoyed this write, especially the form and the structure. The last line was great!
Waiting

And now resides

Eternally

The previous tenant

Was a liar



And was evicted.


Good job my friend,

Jason

[ANNA]

I can't tell you how much this gave me a peace of mind!! WOW I cried by the first line! You are an angel. I'm so emotional right now that I'm blessed to still be writing. This so just BRILLIANTS. Tha way you created it and place ever word in the right place. You shocked me. I can't help but wish to know how did you write this? Did it just flow out or did it take time?

And it spoke to me�



"Drink of me,

Or you shall suffer
A spiritual death.
Your insatiable need to love
And to be loved �
Will be no longer.
Your purpose will be taken
It will spill from you
Causing a flood
And the one who truly needed you
Who is waiting to love you
Will drown.

So I drank�( Freaking amaqzing and Brilliant lady!!)

There notting in here I don't like. Plus I love how you made is long because if you would have stop somewhere inbetween it wouldn't have been right!! I'm so greatful for you sending this. Evicted Is my # ONE FAV. Yes it is!! In your writings..Thanks so much for sharing your giftful writing to me

Much love n respect,
Anna

[Bhavya Kaushik]

"Where it has always been
Waiting
And now resides
Eternally
The previous tenant
Was a liar

And was evicted."

Wow! What a beautiful flow, Great piece of writing and I loved the imagery in it the most.
Excellent choice of words and very simple but strong formatting which is enhancing it's flow even more..
Great work...!

[Jazmyne]

wow this was another amazing poem. the way each line..kind of spoke out. each line had a rhym that flowed when reading it. different and still amazing. you are a great writter. thank you for letting us read your work.

[MandarinOranges]

WOW!!! That was one, if not THE, best reading experiences I've had in a long time. Your words flow so easily together to form the story in my mind. Now, tell me please..where can I find this fountain?! lol

Seriously awesome write!!!

[Mr. Lopez]

This was a non stop flow of great lines , one after another. extremely discriptive and precise. I loved the prgression into clarity ! Awesome !! This last stanza kicked butt.

Clarity...
Perception
Changed its direction
And found the place
Where true love is conceived
Within
Where it has always been
Waiting
And now resides
Eternally
The previous tenant
Was a liar
Sorry to paste the whole stanza but i thought it was the cherry on top ! Great .